- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Sleeper
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Click hereI sleep 10,000 years every night I close my eyes,
every night behind the barricade of lids.
A room bereft of light, patient prison numbing zeal
that the cycle of a gnawing age forbids.
An ultra rapid zone in a bubble of my own,
a slow-motion clue of notions through a veil.
I live 10,000 lives in the timespan of a sigh,
but I find it so exhausting to exhale.
I take 10,000 breaths every time you look away,
in your underwater freezeframe weary pace.
Composed in common cool, time to manicure the mask,
that you long since know can never be my face.
So press your healing hands to my ancient aching soul,
while I fade away, repair this tearing seam.
I sleep 10,000 years every night I close my eyes,
but I find it hard, so very hard, to dream.
- COMMENTS
jthserraabout 20 years agoWoody Allen did a Sleeper too, but this one is so much more poetic... :). An excellent twist on the challenge line. That line had me scratching my head for some time, but you made it fit your poem so well.
jim :)
Angelineabout 20 years agoand it's a 5 in form and content, but I think it can be a 10. This strophe is amazing--
An ultra rapid zone in a bubble of my own,
a slow-motion clue of notions through a veil.
I live 10,000 lives in the timespan of a sigh,
but I find it so exhausting to exhale.
The rest of the poem--while excellent--is outshone by this. I would try to tighten up the rest (for example, lose the "so" at the beginning of your last stanza).
I hope you know I'm nitpicking because this is so good. :)
