- Erotic Poetry
- So Much
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This is my first poetry submission plus it was written, and submitted, in the moment so please keep that in mind. I like it and I hope you do too.
So much I want to say
So much I need to feel
So much I want to play
So much I need that's real
I felt so loved
I felt so needed
I felt soooo dam good
I felt and knew you understood
I need to be a part of you
I need you deep inside me
I need and long to be beneath you
I need to feel you beside me
I thought you were the one who would let me be me
I thought you were the one who I could cling to and still be free
I thought you were the one who shared my every desire
I thought you were the one who would forever set my soul on fire
I long to stroke you
I long to hear you cum
I long to taste you
I long to feel my body hum
I don't want you to move on
I don't want to watch you leave me
I don't want to be without you
I don't want you disbelieving me
So much I still am feeling
So much I looong to do
So much my body's willing
So much I explored with only you
So much I want to share
So much I ache to fly
So much I need to dare
So much I still need to try
My heart belongs to you
So I'm strongly tempted
To say I'll fight for you
Then once and for all strife be ended
But you've made your choice
And used your voice
I know I need to respect it
Yet I can't help feeling I'm being neglected
You showed me that you loved me
Then told me so, it's true
But now replaced I'm so sad and lonely
And very very blue
You have to see the light
You have to know the truth
You have to understand
You have to always love only you
So much we had
So much I'm glad
So much was lost
So much it cost
So much we yearned
So much was learned
So much we left to linger
So much we burned........
That I will forever wonder.
- COMMENTS
erectus123almost 11 years agoPerhaps a little too lengthy to hold attention of reader, if you go for length you need to have details that keep reader glued to your exposition. When you have so much repetition in the form it lends itself to a shorter poem so as not to be boring. i.e. you can say a word over and over but at 5-8 repetition it looses meaning.
Also, the "meat" of the poem is in the 9,10,11 stanza, that is the focus that came on so late I missed it in the first reading. Why not work with the "breakup" in detail, it would make poem stronger and emotionally charges instead of sing-song. You are on the way, keep at it. Lots of good rhyme and thoughts here about young romance.
