- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Stones
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Click hereWhen Harry said words were stones
I thought the idea plausible,
didn't understand
till I went to write
nothing
sprang fourth,
scrabbling, mining for words,
casting aside anything not precious
gems, seeking gold,
back aching labour
pick axe rise
pick axe fall
I find nothing, I stall,
fall short on desire,
mired in muck,
just sat here stuck,
a pile of gravel,
staring at a mountain that will
only mine
nothing
take up carving
in stone
instead,
a hammer
a chisel to
chip the chaff
away from the
core of polished marble
to reveal the beauty
within the stone.
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- COMMENTS
twelveooneover 10 years agoI don't know if I agree
however if it makes sense to you, writer always takes preference
regarding the poem, it is an old troupe, but you are a new writer, and it it not that ordinary
5ed
HarryHillover 10 years agoComment in the POBO. Agree that chaff does not fit with masonry in any shape or form. understand why you used it. It's been a long time since the first of yours I've seen, one involving carpentry if I remember correctly. Words can be wood or water or air or any number of things, but I think that words have become life to you... to us all in fact. idk. chip away, sand, breathe, drink... write.
greenmountaineerover 10 years agoI liked the word play, tod, and the interspersing of the rhymes with the short lines gave it a cadence I liked, what felt like persistence until the chipping away produced the vision one has of beauty. I wouldn't have used "chaff," maybe rubble.
Ashesh9over 10 years agoIf you carve your name in stone , it may still decay
But if you imprint your name in the hearts of people
It will forever endure 'n stay !
