- Erotic Poetry
- submissive origami
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It takes imagination to create
a little force to crease
bend in ways not known before
to ponder a moment
in origami silence.
I know you
pliable, willing to fold your edges
Into a shape designed
to stir hunger in my eyes
illicit desire for more
to find the boundaries
of your submission
how many ways you can bend
but not break
a crane of pristine white
soars for me into night
- COMMENTS
Magnetronover 9 years agoI feel you could lose this
"to ponder a moment
in origami silence."
while capitalizing on the unintended rhyme that emerges.
I'm not really fond of the title. It lacks the originality that the poem itself exudes.
Definitely a 5.
Ashesh9over 9 years agoSoars for me into the night ......!
Immortal lines , Tod :5-ed .
