- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Summer without rain
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Nothing grows
Nothing green
Tired trees sigh with the indifferent breeze
Listless and weary
Not even the anger of a storm
No rain
No rain
Just the sun with its cold smile
And the shallow blue
of a empty sky
- COMMENTS
KOLKOREover 17 years agoHey guys: read this fast! But don’t read it once. The poem is misleading with its simple appearance. Takes some work and more talent to make it look that way… Now read it again, and pay attention to each word and its place.
As I try to put something of the work I comment on in my comments, the title’s repetition goes beyond my (well deserved) enthusiasm. With carefully timed repetitions - first of a word, then of a line, the author imitates human speech which bemoans: “No rain; No rain”.
In addition, I was reminded of your poem: “So Hard”, in which you played with closed images of romantic love, by breaking them down at the end of each line. Here you similarly employ beautiful oxymoronic expressions, such as: ‘cold sun’ or ‘shallow blue’ (as opposed to the expected ‘deep blue’).
There is more, but I think, by now, people should revert to your poem.
My Erotic Trailover 17 years agothe sun's cold smile >> perhaps a burning grin <grinin' I enjoyed your poetry, thanks for the read!
