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Click heretasting flesh
tongue whipples, riding goosepimples
to ground. rounding out, tanking
touring, turning
golden freckles into frenzy
frolicking bare back
rides. high-topping stirrups,
standing my ground
with whipped cream licks
to side stepping pokes 'n prods. slide
slide
feel the wet slide of taste buds
bursting, along your pristine proud cock,
clock winding turns into a strawberry
suicide slushie. spitting your seeds
while licking, lounging along furry
thighs dustless den. tasting, testing
breathlessness again ...
this is an exuberant poem, RF!
I mean it!!, busy and visual. I loved it. and it kinda reminds me of one I eeeked out--- It's not what you know, by normal jean
keep up the good work!!
xoxo
maria
whipple def. is wrong lol.. that is what I get for looking it up on the web!!! but over all I still like the word and how it rolls in your mouth lol..
du lac
I really liked the use of the word whipple... (Psychoanalysis. a mental process by which unpleasant or painful ideas are abolished from the mind.)this twist at the start had me reading more. I found the form breaks uncomfortable at some places as well as some overused cliques but overall this has a ton of potential! Your erotic writes are always "breathless" leaving one wanting more. thank you for the read
du lac
You've dropped the familiar and push out and grow. Congrats on that. I read this over several times today and while there is some question in my mind about structure, my biggest real concern is in those first two lines — they feel like they'd work better as three lines. Go ahead and play with the rest to your heart's content.
i mentioned this poem in the new poem review thread in the poetry forum - wildsweetone