The Epistle to St. butters

Harry, I like this poem and I think there is a gem here waiting to be lapidated. I agree with 12 about the enjambments — and maybe it's just me, you know? But in my opinion, there are words to be cut, and line breaks to rethink, that would make this an even better poem.

A quick hack job, just something to consider (disregard if inappropriate):

Were I under the duvet with thee,
my love, the dustbin could overflow
with culled love poems, a tear for each
discarded in order to see the next
from she that covers a heart in honey
licks it clean, dainty pleased ablutions
pours again, and suddenly
a duvet's too warm

5ed, of course.more...