- Non-Erotic Poetry
- The Hunt
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Click hereAfter the hunt
The dogs lie
Exhausted
Tangles of fur,
Legs and teeth
Before the fire.
Horses steam
In the night air
Stabled now
With oats, hay
Blankets on
Neigh to rest
Broken guns
Lie cleaned,
Safe on the table
The ale is deep
And needed
In Highland mists
- COMMENTS
Kobaabout 13 years agoA very good poem! Great imagery! I especially liked "legs and teeth before the fire". For some reason it reminded me of Jack London.
Angelineabout 13 years agobut very well written. I like the way you've broken the syntax across lines and snuck in some interesting wordplays, too. Also the poem is full of movement, scent and strong visual though I think the last strophe is least successful with that. You could, for example, revise the last three lines in a way so we hear the ale being poured or the glass slid across a table, something to keep those sense tickling phrases going right to the end of the poem. :-)
GuiltyPleasureabout 13 years ago...visuals. I'd have fewer line breaks to make less choppy. Also you might have described the bag, stag or doe, boar or fox?
I like the "tangle" of dogs, easily visualized.
Tess
