- Non-Erotic Poetry
- The Race
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Click hereIt started out fine
The race of my life
Dreams
Goals
All to achieve
Some has come
Some has gone
All of it not for long
Houses
Cash
luxuries
All seem to ignite in me
A desire to be and not to be
Exhausted in this race I am
For all was done and nothing gained
Love was lost and life itself
This Race
Unstoppable and vain
To find the strength in me
To say
The Race Should be finding Me
- COMMENTS
lorencinoover 15 years agoDisillusioned by the false promise of consumerism, that game of chance that laughs at expectations of achieving what you deserve for the effort you put into it, your poem seems to end with a sense of hopelessness in the face of forces that are too big to deal. However the last line is ambiguous for me and my subtly turn everything around.<br><br>
The "Should" (with its initial cap) in the last line emphasizes the sense of betrayal in the realization that the race is fixed but leaves me unsure of where the poetic voice goes for resolution. Does the poem end in hopeless or is the poet energized by outrage to seek elsewhere for purpose in life?
Keep going, Sharvanem, this is good.
