- Non-Erotic Poetry
- These past years
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Click hereThese past years
She lingered less in my
Waking thoughts:
Why now must she haunt
This world of dreams?
- COMMENTS
LeBrozalmost 16 years agoI can relate to this, so, for me, this small tightly written little poem packs quite a punch.
Angelinealmost 16 years agoI said I liked your other submission (The children) more, but the more I read this one, the stronger it seems to me. The phrase "lingered less in my/Waking thoughts" gives the first image a dreamy, vaporous quality even though that's the "awake" image. I agree with Anschul: you pack a lot of meaning into a few words.
Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum.
Anschulalmost 16 years agoFor the short burst of thought, and a nice way of wrapping your subject up in very few words. A terrific skill. Keep it up!!
