Non-Erotic PoetryThirteenThirteen ain't unlucky
cause Judas betrayed Jesus
disciples don't wear numbers
like a football team.
Thirteen was unlucky
cause two weeks after my birthday
Daddy came to my room
to stick his penis in me.
Fridays ain't unlucky
cause Jesus died on Friday
he rose again on Sunday
or at least that's what we're told.
Fridays are unlucky
cause Daddy goes out drinkin
then comes home late at night
to stick his penis in me.
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IS THIS A COMPLAINT OR A REPORT
next payday get a bunch of 6s about 3 should suffice. TK U MLJ LV NV
The syntax of the first lines threw me a bit, but then when I thought about it more (which is what a poem is supposed to do), they made sense, particularly with the allusion to religion.
I like the way you used language here. On the one hand "ain't" suggests a certain image of the narrator. "Penis" does too instead of "cock" or "prick." It reinforces the innocence of the 13 year old. I also thought not referring specifically to the gender of the victim amplified the poem.
Although disturbing, this was well written and thought provoking.more...
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