- Non-Erotic Poetry
- This Song
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This song is
the soundtrack of my emotions ...
for my lost love,
for my horrid job,
for my fury.
All the things I am feeling
and can't give true
or adequate expression to
swell and riff
with the piano,
the guitar,
the violins,
the voices.
The pace
holds my emotions in check,
or they would race away,
out of my control.
The beauty of the harmony,
the splendor of the bass,
the sweeping grace of the melody
all seem to hold my heart in check,
my tears in store,
my soul in balance.
Don't ask me
to explain it better.
I can't.
This piece of music,
makes me contemplate
what I have lost,
what I may yet lose,
and what I fight against
- COMMENTS
Cleardaynowabout 10 years agoHope you do not mind but I think I will comment at some length – about this and your other very recent poems. I am spurred to write now lest the list grows still longer and I collapse into a small puddle of frustrated analysis. I am emboldened to do so as we share a high regard for Demure’s poems (I keep meeting your comments when I read a few more of her poems)
Clearly I like these poems of yours quite a bit but want to go a bit further than ‘I like that’ or the dreaded ‘I like that but....’. Obviously everything bears the disclaimer ‘in my opinion’.
In practical terms, it seems reasonable to divide the assessment into what is said & how it is said – even though it can be claimed these cannot be separated in a poem.
Generally, this poem very nicely expresses the emotional impact of a special piece of music on us when we are down (my god that’s incisive of me). What lifts it to another level is the last three lines. These get me both in what is said & somehow in the words. Slightly mad, slightly enigmatic and a bit like an incantation. To mix my metaphors yet further, these last lines punch through. Very well done.
I am not sure it matters whether the song in question is referring to an actual piece of music or is referring to the poem itself.
