- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Thistle
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Click hereIn the middle of a rose field I grow
lonely, thorny
Tentatively I grow myself a flower,
only to notice that I am a thistle
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 14 years agohow one word can come close to ruining an otherwise good poem. Drop that one word and read it, see how much stronger the poem is. Adverbs are crutches for those with weak vocabularies. You seem to have a good one though, don't allow that one thing to trip up your work.
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Anonymousover 14 years agoWhen the thistle blooms then it radiates its own vibrant personallity.
Best wishes.
lorencinoover 14 years agoSo simple and yet so effective at evoking the beauty of the fresh-faced and unassuming among us. There is a rich contrast between the idea of "I'm only a thistle" and the fact that the thistle is, in fact, quite beautiful in its own unique way. Well done! <br><br>
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UnderYourSpellover 14 years agoI love this made me smile too it is the almost the Ugly Duckling story in reverse. Well done defintely the best of the day
