- Erotic Poetry
- Time Out
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'Time out'
hold the phone
put on the brakes
stop the presses
desk cleared in one rake
Like the eyes of a skull
watching me
Your not here
but I feel your stare
My whole mental world
comes to a red light
when I think of you
my escalator stops
gazing into your pools
from memory
trying to see what
was at the bottom
of your deep water blue
recalling words
that stung like a slap
mixed with images
of you on your back
abstract smiling eyes
moon light on your thighs
moon pie tittie
lapping hungry lips
rumped and rode
like a washing machine
cat claw rake and bite
wild hair on a full moon
I've looked down the barrel
of your intended words
daring you to shoot
so I could see your fire
there is still the smoldering
scooping from a muddy pool
and trying to throw water
back up to the falls
futile in a raining down pour
of memories
I can still feel the pain
of cupids broadhead
that tore through my heart
It rips my soul
the different roads we go
Like a candle in a blizzard
it's all I have
to keep me warm on a cold night
visions of you
in the dim light
The lights been green
for quite a while
but I have to take 'Time out'
when I think of you
- COMMENTS
~hellbaby~about 19 years agoThe washing machine is great, so easy to put yourself there. This made me think of rock and roll, don't know why it just has a beat to me. I like it a lot.
Fast1about 19 years agoand timing
abstract smiling eyes
says it all
a great line
agree with some of the others, needs a little tweaking
Wanton Vixxxenabout 19 years agoMy Goddess, Art! You really took Me on one helluva breathless ride tonight with this one! Geeeez! I'm NEVER gonna get over the pneumonia THIS way!<gasp, gasp> But it was well worth the money spent on the iron lung <wink>
Still outta breath~
Vixxx
Bridget69about 19 years agoThe reference to the red light/green light, brings to mind stopping at a crossroad in our life, in which we look back on the distance we've traveled and in which we decide in what direction we now want to head in. I also loved the following passage,
"Like a candle in a blizzard
it's all I have
to keep me warm on a cold night
visions of you
in the dim light"
Great images throughout.
Anonymousabout 19 years agoThe first line brings so many thoughts to my mind... a child in need of discipline, strategical methods in sports for winning the game, and an all out retreat from reality. A great first stanza that builds. Like Eve I feel some tweaking is needed for I believe the poet can use more original descriptions..."pools" etc. but over all a wonderful read, variations in rhythm and speeds... stop and go that feels like a heart beat....
Du~
Mentioned in the Sunday reviews.
