- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Tongue in Mouth
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Click hereA spear of light shining
down on me.
Time is always
on my mind.
Longing deep and
continuous
fills me up and
I runneth over.
I watch the birds
eating the seeds
of discontent
with you somewhere
far far away.
Are you here yet?
Tell me you love
me baby,
tell me I’m your
gal.
But don’t take
too long,
the days are growing shorter
by the minute.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 18 years agoI think gal is fine. I'm your woman/I'm your girl: neither of these sound right.
I really like the last phrase: But don’t take
too long, the days are growing shorter by the minute.
A powerful, sad sense of time passing!
ravenxover 18 years agoAnother brilliant poem, my love. excellent excution. Aa wonderfull play on words.
Anonymousover 18 years ago"I watch the birds
eating the seeds
of discontent"
I like the mix with the new and familiar.
I am not crazy about "gal" for some reason, seems too old fashioned for this poem? I don't know. Just my feeling. :)
SR
