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Click heremy breath flees in sweetness,
sizzles in fingertips
leaves my chest arched high and wanting.
it pools, puffs after you, dear.
sweet cloud of desire
sweet aura of heated flesh.
the moment before touching
is more poignant than the touch
the last instant, inevitability
when molecules of skin
leap the last gap of scalded air
and we blend,
we see the universe there
in one sacred centimeter.
all true music incorporates silence.
each rest, each beat
essential as the purest note.
so a Touch is made up,
a vast curving rainbow
a breath, a lessened space, a savoring,
a longing for another
even before it ends.
your images a very strong, you are able to convey the desire so well. the moment before touching, very powerful. i enjoyed it. i hope to see more from you.
This flows very well, and there are spots that show vision... "a lessened space" is a wonderful way to say it near the end, so strong you might consider it as the last grouping of words if you rewrite it, which I think you still should. There is some excess. But really, it shows skill and was very pleasant to sit with.
Welcome to Lit;
Especially like that last bit
Of music and silence
The rhythm of love...