- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Under an Alien Moon
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Beneath the dead ice of Europa,
below the howling methane winds
of Titan,
they stir,
feeling the distant heat
of a bloated red sun getting
ready to burp up:
the Eiffel Tower,
all the long-buried cities,
followed by a chaser of the fire whales
who replaced their builders, and,
saddest of all, a sea of
immortal cockroaches, who
once bumped elbows with stegosaurs.
Birth
Sealed away from the universe
by dark cloaks of solid ice,
beneath skies dominated
by breathtaking rings
that they cannot yet see,
floating in oceans that
know no light,
alien tubeworms and bacteria
bask in the growing heat,
unperturbed by the silence
of their extremophile cousins.
Their day is coming.
- COMMENTS
Maria2394about 13 years agosome people had problems with me using the word "squirms" and I was only speaking of maggots ...
I have a teeny problem with "burps up" in a poem that is otherwise close to elegant.
I like this line-
~~alien tubeworms and bacteria~~
especially because I have used something similar in an old poem on the passion thread. Also, I really don;t get the use of the elaborate positioning of the poem, it doesn't do anything for the poem, IMO... anyway, I did enjoy the read :)
~ maria
Kobaabout 13 years agoA magnificent poem! I thoroughly got it! The imagery is frightening and I think that is what I like the most about this poem! Well done!
twelveooneabout 13 years agoI've looked at your stuff 3 or 4 times, I can't figure out what's going on, I'll assume it's me.
5
theognisabout 13 years agoAnother interesting poem that doesn't quite seem to deserve a five, but gets one anyway.
vrosej10about 13 years agoThis is really good. Epic stuff, stirring, Wagnerian. I think you lose the meaning thread a bit in the death section though, still excellent though. Getting a recommend. You write very well and I am interested in what comes next.
