- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Water Music
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I can hear your keyboard
tapping rhythmically as castanets
through the surf of your emotion
as if it's music you were writing,
not a poem. I see the shiver and flash
of your fingers, salmon sifting downstream
to flow into that electronic ocean.
Its current carries words to me.
At times, there is a pause, as if a trumpet
there plays a solo part—a short dirge,
a lament—the percussion humbled, silent.
Then returns the patter of the fugue,
thoughts set out like rain or waves
beneath and licking at a pier.
In my response,
I am respectful as is water in a glass
set near the clock on your nightstand
in case you find that you are thirsty
sometime later in the night. A nocturne
in a minor key, played with pedal down.
Because, of course, of course, the sea.
- COMMENTS
twelveooneover 13 years agopatter of the fugue, interesting combination
Bill Dadaover 14 years agoThis is music you've written and it is a poem. Is that done with mirrors? No, but with exquisite command of language.
unpredictablebijoualmost 16 years agothey're always good. But this one is heartwrenchingly so. Just stunning.
LeBrozalmost 16 years agoExquisite interplay of imagery — part music in its tones, part typing of its poetry, and part fluid in its oceanic depths.
Angelinealmost 16 years agoI love music-focused poetry and this does (as Champ commented) have a sort of classical feel, not the clean sound of Mozart to me, maybe something fuller, more romantic like Beethoven or Tychovski. I really like the way you tied in the water theme--from the glass to the river and of course the sea image at the end (a great end line!) which corresponds to surf early in the poem. so I have to ask: how conscious are you of doing that when you write? I often find, after I've written, that I tie threads of theme together intuitively when I write so the notion interests me. Glad I read this one T-man; it's lovely.
