- Non-Erotic Poetry
- what will they say of us
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If said a word.
To forte and crescendo
in the swell of some imaginable wave
and make our entrance
an exit, both.
To have wrestled the cat of eighteen
claws into a cheesecloth sack,
tied with silk,
pronounce ourselves liberated
from the curse of IN
(fidelity, somnia, ebriated, corrigible).
Clutching you as indemnity
against future mythologies, you holding
me as a colliery of argots,
liens placed on my future yield.
A diary could say so much,
but fervor delights in blaze,
temperance in water, beauty
in between.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 18 years agoWelcome to lit, I have also enjoyed reading your work on the threads. I really tried with this poem, especially coming so highly recommended, but while I like the feel and sound of some of the lines, I could not get an overall feel for what you were trying to say. Trust me, I know this means little for me to say this, as I am sure you have a clear reason in your mind, and you have reached many people here. I like that you have an unconventional voice and can tell you have talent and intelligence. I look forward to reading more of your work!
annaswirls
twelveooneabout 18 years agoWelcome, I'm sorry I can't be so effusive. A little overdone
"from the curse of IN
(fidelity, somnia, ebriated, corrigible)."
comes off as a little too cute, for starters.
Anonymousabout 18 years agoI can't help but say there is certain air of cheekiness in the delivery of this poem. Nice work.
Liarabout 18 years agoI thoroughly enjoyed the poem, it's musicality and bravery in word choices. Welcome to Lit indeed.
Anonymousabout 18 years agois very impressive. I really liked the ending lines. I, too, have read your work in the passion thread, and agree with TheRainMan. Definitely, stick around. You have talent! I can't wait to read more. Write on!
saldne
