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Click hereWill you walk with me now in the evening?
The clouds are beginning to break up
And the blackest black sky that's behind them
Makes the stars seem to shine even brighter
We'll walk out along the old hedgerow
We'll walk with your arm holding mine
We'll walk out beyond pasture fence line
Where the field is just mown and untrodden
I'll spread out my coat on the grass there
We'll sit and we'll watch the clouds scatter
We'll talk softly of night time and our love
And wait for the late rising moon
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Will you go walking again in the morning?
We won't see the mists of September
But the frost will have made lacey patterns
On the grass and the leaves on the ground
Our dog will sniff out all the pathways
Of the critters that passed in the nightime
And the horses might follow behind us
With the hope of a carrot from you
The clouds may be pink or gray shaded
The sky a shade lighter than blue
And we will talk of the times yet before us
As the sun warms a beautiful morning
Been getting some good coaching from great poets lately.
you have started painting vast pictures in your words. this is an easy 5 from me
Something about these lines "We'll walk with your arm holding mine
We'll walk out beyond pasture fence line" took my breath away.
Fantastic piece of writing here.
Possibly your best.
As you so often do, you paint such a wonderful picture. In this one there is also the feeling that there is something else behind it - not defined but wonderful and great. Congratulations for not trying to make the metophor (or whatever it is) more overt.
The flow is pretty good too.