"Thmmf hrff..."
I feel a gentle kiss on my forehead as Nightwing envelops me with her wings to protect me from the night. I fall asleep after about two seconds, and I know that Nightwing is close behind.
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So, did you guys like? I know I liked writing it - a lot.
So, how do you think that Peter and Nightwing should progress? After this, their sex will be a bit more spaced out - especially after Peter fucked her like a beast - so there will be a bit more storyline and character development.
Of course, I know that most of you don't care about that at all. But for those of you that do care about the story of this, well...story, here's what I have to say to you:
Expect a lot of blood, gore, and absolute bad-ass characters. In case you think I'm hyping it up too much, then I will tell you of one I plan to introduce relatively soon: an Elf that kills his enemies by punching right through their rib cage with a pneumatic fist and crushing their hearts. But don't worry, it will mostly be his attitude that is badass.
In any case...
Boop.
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I loved reading your story so far. I have seen one error though, and its a small one. At first you say that Nightwing caught 2 rabbits, and Peter cooked the rabbits, but the you said "Peter wolfed down the SQUIRREL" other than that I saw nothing wrong, other than some of the things other reviewers stated.more...
Interesting to me
Thoughts that I have though it might be of a cliche would be if they started to develop closer to one another than just a mistress and slave. I see the potential for that working the longer that they remain together. Other thoughts mirror some of what the others who posted have said. Basically there needs to be some sort of external conflict that faces them. Perhaps being attacked by an unknown force? It could cause more of a drive to develop Peter into one who is more akin to that of dragonkind.
By that I refer to a protective nature and perhaps finding internal strength (magical or non-magical) inside of him if things look like she is in dire danger or something like that. It could be something even as simple as perhaps one of her past mates coming into the picture and growing jealous or enraged that a human is bedding one that he had been with. From there he could perhaps find an internal courage because let's face it, he is a bit too soft and meek from what has been displayed. He seems more like an "Everyman" than someone that is involved with a mystical being. Perhaps that is what you were going for, but I think he should have a shining moment where he surprises even himself.
Also concerning the topic of conflict, perhaps going a bit with the first topical idea of a budding romance or love between Peter and Nightwing. There could be internal conflict with her, him, or even both with the feelings that they are going through if that kind of thought actually manifests into this story.
Aside from these thoughts, which I do sincerely hope is not offensive to you, I must say the story seems well written, and does not go all over the place with random topics or ideas. I can only hope you continue to do well with this and continue to develop this story into an epic series.more...
chapter 03 character idea?
You should make some sort of bad ass rouge who usually wears a banana over his mouth and is a basic ninja except cooler. Maybe a bad ass double staff (a staff with blades on both ends) and a cape? possibly joining up with Peter and Nightwing?more...
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