A Friend in Need Ch. 01

Many of these stories that claim to be about cheating are actually about stupidity.

Goddamn, can't believe you never did a part 2

Addendum

The real bad promise is that this is 8 years late for Chapter2.

This story’s worst fault (IMHO) is that the actual characters rarely (if any) are trusted to actually talk with each other! Instead, Hubby tells us (in his own words) what Sweetie and Matthew say to each other! Next problem is that the narration is casual about what happened in the more distant past and what was more recent. Also, it seems unclear whether the main characters live very close by or much more distantly (made current connection on social media, but are currently meeting in person!)

Finally, Hubby ignores what are very obvious ‘sexual predator’ tactics, but does not alert Sweetie to that possibility!

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Ezrollin. I think you missed my point. ie; She said to him, "Unless you penis shrunk since the last time we met." I thought they had been boyfriends when she was ten and just held hands. Also. She had a one time fling with a friend of his. Well what led to it? you don't just go up to a woman and ask. Wanna fuck? even if she's drunk. Those are little things I notice when somebody is just trying to extend a story to fill in a whole page. She went to his house after work. And his children were still at school? Wouldn't he have picked out a better place than at home? Why throw stuff in there that are not going to have anything with the story? Don't get me wrong. I did like the story. But it could have been a lot better if he had read it and made some changes before printing it. Another thing. Why leave a story started? With as many stories as are submitted every day, What are the odds that either you and I will run across the ending to this story? Tell your story. Keep it simple. but finish it. Thank you for reading.