Dion coughed.
"It's ok," John made a move to stop him, but Dion shook his head.
"No, it's fine, I have to tell you this. Well, he fucked me in front of all the others. I thought something was broken inside when he finally came. I had no more voice or tears in me. And, when I thought the ordeal was over, he ... he just told the others to have their fun with me. Fun," he repeated. "Now that's a word I don't really get. It was probably fun for them. When the Master of the house eventually came, and saw what happened, he just told me to get up and get cleaned up. It was my 'welcome to Drena' party, as Antoine said."
"Fuck me," John murmured under his breath.
"It's not all."
"Shit, not all?"
"No. For the time spent in Drena, Antoine found pure bliss in torturing me almost every day. I was his personal toy. At least, he did not let others fuck me. Not too often. But he was really creative in making everything dreadful for me. One of his favorite pastimes was to choke me while fucking me, until I passed out."
"Oh," John started massaging his forehead. "No wonder you were so scared when coming here. You thought you'd get jumped."
"Yes. But I liked you. Right from the start. I felt safe next to you. So, I want to try it with you. No, not just 'try'. I want it to work."
John got up from the couch. "I want to get out a little," he said in a somber voice.
"Why?" Dion asked alarmed. Was John rejecting him now? After learning he had been nothing but a fuck toy for a sadistic bastard?
"I need to get my head straight. Don't come after me," John warned.
Dion remained there, completely devastated, while the door opened and closed with a small swishing sound.
*****
Author's note:
Phew, this chapter really took me a while to get it done. I know how much you guys want longer chapters, but I'm afraid I'm not doing that well in the attention span area. Anyways, three writer's blocks later and after fighting thoughts like 'Oh, no, I have no idea how I am going to pull this through', here it is. I hope you all enjoyed it. If you did, or if you didn't, please let me know. I just love reading your comments. It makes it all more worthy it.
Since some of you asked for more John and Dion, I hope this chapter fulfills your need for our newest couple. Topher, DreamToCome, odysseus_wanderer, and all the anons who cared about leaving comments, you guys make me cry of happiness. You guys, you da real MVP.
Chris, I am seriously thinking about editing and adding some bits to the final version of the story - for the time when I will publish it - based on your suggestions. For now, what it was written cannot be taken back, so I will have to fight with the draft when I will go over it. Until then, keep your comments coming. They really help me get better.
Love you all, until next time :)
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Contentment is not enough (never) … and the Wind of change doesn’t blow straight
Hi Laura, I’m glad it helped… it was just a little pinprick… you’re really great with words and creating suspense at the right time. I imagine well the situations you build! Go on like this, for me..yep... I like it a lot (just britsh understatement ;.) … and than don’t be shy let us have some arousing thoughts, something like an ecxiting home run… deep breathing.
Surprising this little swirl- a chirrup vortex …where will it go now… a higher power is hanging over their heads, without knowing it… did the rulers suspect something about that experiment they’re livin’ in…I’m curious (don’t go Momo with the grey ones).
… and… I mean …Cory (for me) is still the main character … he’s the hero or he’s not, but I don’t think about him like a stupid thing. He’s taking a deep breath now.. but I see him more… lionhearted, curious, with uncontrolled passion…build up more fear – can fear be stronger than the lullaby of love he ‘s in now? Why didn’t he ask himself to take the flight like Ayn...is Lucas stronger than Cory… because he’s less involved…
Anyway… you see… it still takes me away… I’m really still in love with Xav... and your story Chrismore...
Outstanding
Laura, you're doing an awesome job. This chapter was so good. i really enjoyed it. I know you say you struggled with getting it right, but I almost don't believe you :P Seriously though, I think you really are an amazing writer. I see you using this change of POV so well. It seems like you give us just enough of each situation and keep the pace going so well. You tend to change back and forth at perfect spots in their stories. I think you will do a great job when you go back and work on the original to re-work it b/c I think you learned as you went and developed in a way it takes most authors several stories/books to do so. You're catching a stride here. I say this from the perspective of an avid reader and moreso, from all the beta reading I've been doing the last few years. I'd love to help you if I can when you re-work it. I think it's great that you use the comments to help you as you go. Readers can be a bit help I think. And they are just as passionate about your work as you are sometimes :)
Having more of John and Dion was great. You really, really kicked ass with Dion having the strength to go after John like that. I loved how he was talking to Dion and drunk when his ex finally pops out from under the table. We assumed he went there for that POS, but first it looked like he was just getting smashed. I would love to see when that trick finds out John didn't come that next night. At least he better not!!! I can't believe he left Dion after he opened up like that. Will it be too much for him? I don't think so. Maybe he went to do something nice for Dion. He has to realize all the attempts Dion made to make him happy while he was on this pity party thinking that like Andreas, Dion had it so much better in Drena. I hope he returns soon. Poor Dion.
I loved the chemistry between Xav and Ayn. I love it. I loved how Xav (lol my name is Xavier and not some contraction you come up with lol) managed to keep up the high brow, 'i am not having fun here' stuff. I love their little game. And then in little degrees and body language, they both slowly reveal they are happy like this. I hope you keep that little game going between them in a way that they both know they are playing, yet realize they are good together somehow. Ayn admitted it and I think Xav is close to admitting it, but I think he's more likely to admit it in action than words.
Wow, those grey guys are scary. I am really terrified for Cory. What will they do to him. And Lucas isn't in that much less danger. Will you reveal to us what you mean about Drena being an experiment? It kinda explained how this world you created seemed to exist in a normal world closer to our existence outside of those walls. and also what they meant when they said they didn't mold Lucas. Where did he come from? Actually, where did any of the masters and slaves come from? It seems they were all born to this life and didn't know any other. Are they taking kids from someplace and raising them in this environment? Where did Cory and Dion live before they went to the institute? where did they grow up? God, there has got to be so much in play here that we don't know and it is scary how much those grey guys really know.
They are right though, those two men, lucas and Xavier, were so changed by Cory and who he is. Hell, he helped Dion and Ayn too. Will lucas be smart enough to protect himself and Dion somehow and act proactively or will he have to try to save Cory? I don't know that he would be able to even with how smart he is. I hope we don't have to suffer through seeing those two destroyed somehow and suffering. But, what else can they do? Ugghhh I hate Antoine and I really don't want to see Cory left to him. I don't believe that Cory will do well if he is taken from Lucas. I think the strength he has will wilt quickly. I hope I am wrong.
Good luck with the coming chapter. I think it will be rough as this comes to a head with Lucas and Cory and as you reveal more about Drena and what is behind the curtains!more...
gets better and better...;)
I do enjoy reading your chapters,long or short, they all keep me wanting more, all your characters have something to keep wanting to know more about them,as you successfully described the life they had....to their loving partners, I do not have even one character that I detest, even the ones that treat their slaves with words of hurt,but I do like how they kiss them and stroke there lips.. You do have a way with really feeling how they so desire to make their masters wanting them.... guess I got lost into my comments..lol..but just to say, you are a very creative writer...of erotica ..;)more...
Excellent story
Wonderful story, good plot and characters. Team John+Dion! Can't wait for the next chapter!
loved it!
As difficult as it was fir me to read this story at first the more I love it now. All your characters got an own story and an own way of dealing with life. Cant wait to read more!
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