So, I would love to hear from you. Tell me what you think, straight and with no sugarcoating. What do you think will happen now? What should Lucas do to exact revenge? He had to keep his cool in front of the Trainers, but he's seething on the inside. Why do you think was Cory branded? (That is a bit that will play an important part in the story, and I've already chosen the symbol).
Next time, we'll take a trip across the continent, to Lucas's home town. Cory's adventures are just beginning, I promise! And yes, Chris, he is still the hero ;) I could never forget about him. He will continue to be the red thread that keeps everyone connected, and the key to everything. I felt just like you about him, that he is more fearless, driven by love, but fate is not always kind, and as the song says 'there are storms we cannot weather'. And don't worry, the grey ones, as you say, will play an important part and their role will be revealed at the right time. At the moment, no one knows what they really are, and ... as they discover, so will you and I.
DreamToCome, I am so glad you continue to enjoy and I hope the guys will continue to help you have nice dreams ... ;)
Cannd, as always, your elaborate comments are making me so happy. It is like having a dear friend noticing every little thing I thought about while writing, and, as it is often said, the author writes thinking about her readers, but, at times, one in particular becomes the one the author thinks is addressing as putting together the story. For your continuous interest and support, I deeply thank you.
All you guys on team John and Dion, I hope this chapter was to your liking. Their story was a bit of a side one, but I did enjoy writing about them. There will be less of them in the upcoming chapters, but they will return at opportune times.
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Some storm!
I must say, this chapter had it all ! ..lots of Drama,Revenge time...etc.. I felt Cory's pain , and how Lucas was so heated over what happened to his Lover....I was a bit wary you would have him pick a new servant, but then I thought 'NO he LOVES Cory too much and now [can understand why] He wants revenge!...hope he gives it..maybe take a hot iron to Antione...well am sure you will come up with something 'Epic' ;) ...
I am writing a story for fun myself, and I was feeling a bit crazy for actually having emotions for my 'gay characters when someone attacks them, I oddly can't even keep them separated for long time!..with the love they have between them..like your characters... Cory and Lucas I must say are my favorites..why I guess I felt strong remorse for them both... Yes a write has to add adventure,twists,unexpected, which keeps us fans reading!.. I look forward to your chapters, as you already know..;) ..keep up the good suspense!...Lucas , hope he gets sweet 'revenge' on Antione..!more...
It's creeping in, this flimsy ... emotion! (L.S.Fox)
Wow. I’m surprised. You are kicking up a lot of dust… One of the masters has gone… the other is brought on the edge… what about the experiment? Did Lucas know he could be replaced as well? Can a simple good servant be the millstone around the neck in this? I think he is like the two Mr Gone wrong…
It’s always hard to wake up from a sweet dream … a moment you’re safe and the other ..hell in earth… for the characters so for the author who’s writing… it’s hard to come back to positive feelings some times, especially when you’re dragged to the ground like Cory. Someone said “good no details about that … for me it depends… everything was in movement not static…he would have screamed out loudly when he was made bleeding? When you’re suffering your mind go black not clear…I think him scream out loudly in fear and pain… trying to move …only bad words for Antoine in what remains of thinking.
On the one hand there is his dream to be taken by many and that had made him aroused in the past, on the other the violence suffered with no way out…. The opposite of his current ideal situation…when it comes to love everything bad is hidden … changes. But does it really – was he so innocent in mind… could he have been after his past? It’s hard than to be strong in such a situation…. He had underestimated Antoine in a very single moment having his mind obscured by the love for Lucas, a failure he had paid. But you left the door open… there’re Lucas safe arms…
What about the technology … there are no maps but cars?
Waiting impatiently for news ( and somthing new from Xav)
Chris
maybe you understand English is not my mother tongue… I hope it fits anyway… )more...
OOPs!
That isn't what I meant! I meant it takes courage for a writer to have bad things happen to good people in a story. Of course I didn't like that. I was shocked and sad. I wish bad things never had to happen in stories. Sometimes I can't finish a story when I anticipate disaster. this is called foreshadowing in storytelling. Risk makes adventure. Cory is smart and beautiful and a good person but...his naivete brought him to danger as he grew too confident. I hope for a happy ending, in fact, I expect it this time. Lord Lucas will pull him through because life isn't about avoiding crisis, it's finding strength to endure the worst. Love is equal to any hate, stronger than pain.more...
O HELL No
I have NEVER called out anyone for their opinions on a story but nanobot you are an idot with your dumb ass comments you actually managed to piss me off more you think Cory deserved to be beaten,gang raped,branded because he is manipulative are we reading the same story. Me Fox you said you are going somewhere with Cory's rape please hurry and get their because these men seems to be suffering with no happiness in sight it's a damm depressing story but I've gotten hooked , I love Cory , Dion, Ayn ,Lucas and John. The next chapter should be LUCAS REVENGE on a God damm nuclear scale. Keep up the good writingmore...
MORE!!!
It really saddens me to say you aren't going to write much more of Dion and John. They are my faveourite. I'm excited to see where this will go though. You're stories really do need to be longer though!
Some criticism though is that this chapter seems a little bit rushed with no attention to detail and things just flowing more jumpy as though we missed bits inbetween.more...
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