"Wow," I said softly.
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We walked down the street hand-in-hand again, toward the marina. Since I couldn't remember much about the evening of the day before, I couldn't help but wonder if the cycle would repeat itself and I'd find myself fucking people I didn't know in a place I didn't remember getting to.
"So where were we last night," I asked as we walked.
"The condo of a friend of mine. I'm a member of an artist's cooperative — we all share a gallery together. That was our monthly meeting," she laughed.
"A wild bunch! Are you guys always like that?" I asked.
"No, that was all you and the opium. Some of the girls haven't had a nice cock in quite a while," she laughed.
"Well they certainly got some last night. There was some wild fucking goin' on," I said.
Tiamo squinted at me and looked quizzical.
"You know you were the only man there, right? Just you and eight horny women."
Suddenly some of the evening came back into focus, and Tiamo smiled as she watched me remember.
"Those women will never forget you," she said. "It was really quite a night."
We got to the marina and I invited her aboard, but she declined.
"I must go Steve, back to reality," she said. "You know, I think you were sent to me, to remind me why life is so wonderful. I was feeling sorry for myself lately, which isn't like me at all. You came along at the perfect time."
"So we helped each other then, because you came along at the perfect time too," I said.
"Goodbye Steve," she said as she kissed me.
"Goodbye Tiamo," I said.
"Don't forget what I told you yesterday," she said just before she turned to walk away. "Keep your new love in mind, but don't forget your old loves. They enrich our lives, even after they're gone."
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What's the difference in using a - and an / to separate thoughts? Or make a transition. You make me laugh.
Another 5*
Love this story, and write it any way that works for you. It's easy enough to interpret the use of -, if you ever get to the point where your making money writing, someone else can edit that. What some people don't seem to remember is that the thing about writing is, you have to get it on paper while it's flowing.more...
bit distracting/confusing
In some locations the use of "word -- word," causes confusing and/or distracts making reading difficult. The author has learned this bad grammar form and needs to go bad to whatever school grade to learn again. This isn't a pause or change of thought, for which the proper grammar is either a coma or semi-colon. A really good editor which knows basics would be worth finding.
Beyond these faults the story has some good reading.more...
And The Saga Continues Erotically Rollin' Along!
This is a writer that just doesn't write or ramble along but makes all of their work more than just an interesting read throughout for anyone intelligent enough to checkout what is offered. Any inexperienced writer could learn quite a few things from this individual while enjoying the trip of readership!
BRAVO!!more...
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