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AUTHOR'S NOTES
Our nameless protagonist does not know how his power works other than it appears to be genetic and kicks in around puberty. He has had this power for a while now and through his investigations (aided by many who of course do not remember lending their expertise) he has some understanding of how it works but not why.
Our protagonist's abilities:
- allow control of a subject's motor functions, both voluntary (walking, moving head and arms, etc) and autonomic (breathing, heart beating, etc). He does not like to control autonomic functions however due to the high risk of killing the subject by for example forgetting to tell his heart to beat.
- control is executed through commands ('run', 'jump', 'pick up that object', etc). The subject's body seems to be able to work out the details as long as the command is not too vague (so 'hit that man' will work but not 'hit anyone who looks threatening').
- commands are transmitted mentally.
- He can read minds and memories, and can change the intensity of base emotions (fear, anger, lust, etc) but cannot create or change thoughts, switch a subject's emotions or affect complicated emotions (love, jealousy, etc).
- He can create visual, auditory and tactile illusions. These work as normal commands - he tells the subject what to see/hear/feel and the subject's mind works out the details provided the illusion is simple.
- commands can only be given to subjects in direct line of sight. Detection of other minds is possible through walls, etc up to a certain distance, but they cannot be altered unless our protagonist can see the person.
- Commands remain effective until removed by the protagonist, even if the subject is no longer in view.
- Commands can be made to only one subject at a time, but multiple subjects can be controlled by giving commands to one, then the next, then the next, etc.
- larger scale and/or simpler commands work better than fine detailed ones. The protagonist cannot change facial expressions, and attempts to force speech results in meaningless slurring.
The protagonist's only real fear is that someone like him will notice his ability and take it away from him. Consequently any potential activity is investigated and if another 'Talent' such as he is discovered he takes steps to neutralize the danger. He has not yet met a Talent with abilities as strong as his, but he feels sure they are out there, somewhere.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 7 years agoYour stories are awesome. I noticed that some of them are based on real persons and I wonder if even the swim team is. If not, could you please give us some references (for example, names of actresses or celebrities) who could resemble them? I am curious to see how you imagined their faces. Thank you!
Mephisto_Pegariover 8 years agoAuthorThanks for the comments Anon(s), I'm glad you enjoyed this.
The breast cancer thing - yeah, that was a little cold. I wanted to have a way for her to have augmented breasts that wasn't "she's a porn star" or "she's superficial and needs attention". A little too far into realism, I suppose.
"surprisingly large amount of spelling errors" - sorry, I did try to read through this a few times before posting. But a story this long is quite tiring to write and by the time I'd finished I just wanted it posted and done.
Internal cumshots/impregnation are not my particular fetish (the protagonist is sterile, as I think I mentioned somewhere in the story). I'll write it where it fits the story, but it's not something I aim to have every time.
MePe
Anonymousover 8 years agoFantastic job man, you handled the large amount of girls wonderfully, each one felt very distinct and had their own personality. The flow was also superb, and aside from a surprisingly large amount of spelling errors, everything about this story was pretty much flawless. Gotta say though, I was somewhat disappointed that the protagonist didn't get to cum inside all of them, would've been great to see him fill up Jemima and Alia's cunnies with hot jizz while they begged him not to. ;)
Anonymousalmost 9 years agoBeen a fan of your stuff since finding part 1 on mcstories. If you're not tired of the series I think a hot mom/daughter scenario, with the protagonist drawing out some jealousy from the mother, could be sweet.
My only criticism? The breast cancer survivor thing is a little too real for something like this. It introduces real life consequences and that's the last thing I'd want to think about while reading a stroke story
