A Tale of Revenge Ch. 02

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Geoff was out of the water and up the rise in a flash. The rest of the children began hollering after him, egging him on. This was a matter of honor now. Three generations didn't make her family natives and they screamed at him to get the eastern girl. He grabbed a handful of her pitch black hair, yanking her head back so he could look into her face. Her hands flew to his, trying to dislodge his grip. "Well if you think you are so much cleaner than the rest of us we'd best dirty you up a bit." He reached for some dirt and thrust the handful into her chest, smearing the skin above her neckline with mud. "That should do it!" He declared, and began dragging her towards the water.

It was at this point she realized the heat rising in her chest had started to descend into her lower belly. A strange tingling feeling radiated from the pain in her scalp down her back making her arch a little further. By the time Geoff had dragged her to the edge of the water and was about to throw her in, she realized that something about what was happening to her actually felt good.

She looked up into Geoff's sneering face, her ears buzzing. What was happening to her? Suddenly the pain in her head became intense as he used her hair to launch her into the water.

Anna sat up with a jolt in bed just as her dream self was hitting the frigid water. The pain in her back had been reduced to a deep throb but upon her unexpected movement, it roared back to life and she gasped. Sunlight filtered through the closed shutters and she could hear the noise of the city below her window. She shifted off of her aching bottom and onto her knees, supporting her upper body with her arms against the mattress on all fours.

She moaned slightly as the aches and pains in her back, butt and legs made themselves known individually and all at once. She reached back with one hand. Her skin felt hot and tender under her fingertips, like everything was slightly swollen and raised. She was sure if she could manage to twist and look down at herself she would see the long welts all over her body but she couldn't bring herself to move that much. The pain throbbed through her, moving out into untouched parts of her body. It seemed to curl up in her lower belly, eliciting the same strange excitement that had stirred her memory and caused her dream. She felt as if the pain throbbed at her very core, but it excited her.

She reached down again between her marked thighs. The sticky residue there had dried somewhat but when she pressed her fingers into her core she felt the warm juices run over her fingers. Anna gasped as her fingers brushed against the sensitive bud nestled between her legs. It seemed as swollen and throbbing as the rest of her. Somehow the pain seemed to focus in on this point, begging for some release.

Anna pressed her fingers harder, moaning as shocks of pleasure rippled through her body. She swirled her finger against the aching bud as the waves became more and more pronounced. The pain mingled with the pleasure and the pressure inside her seemed to build in her chest. Her fingers started to move faster, pushing her towards an edge she wasn't sure she wanted to reach. Her aching body clamored for relief.

Anna jerked her hand away from her core and threw herself onto her back on the bed. The harsh sheets against her tender skin pushed the pain to an overwhelming burn that drove the thoughts of pleasure from her brain. It hurt so much it nearly took her breath away. She cursed herself. How could she seek pleasure in her pain? This was her punishment, a reminder of her broken vow to Leonid and her offense to the man she had murdered. Here she was, seeking her own pleasure when her family was dead, her soul sold for revenge and a man's body lay rotting somewhere by her hand.

She lay on her burning back for a moment longer and then shoved herself to her feet, ignoring the protests in her muscles. She would not avoid this pain or try to turn it into something else. When her core began to throb with pent up desire she pushed the sensation from her mind, jerking her new clothing on and hurrying to leave the city. She had to focus. There were many more tests ahead of her. She could not be derailed so quickly.

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
Well put together

Not what I was expecting on a site like this, but great to see a woman’s perspective on intimacy. Looking forward to more character development and where fate takes our heroine.

LaRascasseLaRascasseover 7 years ago
A good second chapter

I like how you reinforce the fact that she can't choose vengeance over justice (as frustrating as it may be for the reader). I could find myself screaming at the screen at Leonid, just give her permission to kill them all already.

5 stars again.

kris10ekris10eover 7 years ago
Perfectly Written

WELL DONE MY DEAR

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
@anon

Thank you so much for your edits. I'm flattered my work warranted such a close reading. I am looking for beta readers and I'd greatly appreciate your help. Email me if you are interested. thanks again!!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago

First, let me say that from what I've read so far (just finished Ch. 2), you have written an excellent story, with good development and depth of your main characters. I'm enjoying the story immensely. I know this was written some time ago, but I am hoping that in the rest of your stories, you will take more care with grammatical errors (e.g., using "then" instead of "than" [p.1 of Ch.2 "...the garment was proving to be more trouble " then" it was worth." Is one example. There were 1 or 2 more occurrences of using "then" when you should have used "than." There were a few other grammar errors, but I can't go back to find them or it will erase this message. Sorry.) And that you also check for small typos, such as (again on page 1 of Ch. 2: "She remembered with searing clarity the feeling on his eyes on hers..." Instead of, "the feeling OF his eyes on hers...). These kinds of errors can really distract a reader from an otherwise fantastic story.

I know that, in a forum such as this, many readers do not care, and may not even notice the kinds of things which I have discussed. In fact, some of the stories on this forum are so poorly written that to offer comment would be a complete waste, and the author would learn nothing, but feel greatly insulted. I see in you much greater potential. You are obviously college-educated and have a strong grasp on how to communicate through the written word. What you need is little more than attention-to-detail and some more careful proof-reading to make your stories among the finest on this board, which I believe to be the best on the internet. So take heart, remember your English composition course, and perhaps have an educated third party proof your work before you submit it. I hope this has been helpful, and - Keep on Writing!

Cheers!

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