A Taste of Cheerleader Discipline Ch. 02

Writer's Update

Based on the feedback and the votes that this story has received so far, it's evident that this chapter was not as popular, well written, or arousing as the first chapter of this series. While this news is disappointing, it's essential for me to learn where I went wrong so that I can get back on track, improve my writing, and tell great stories. My main goals are to entertain and arouse my readers and have my work receive strong recognition/acclaim, and I will do whatever I need to do to achieve those goals. Unless there is a huge response or strong demand, this will more than likely be the final chapter of my "A Taste of Cheerleader Discipline" series. I will continue to write and submit erotic stories, but they will have no direct connection to this series. Thanks again for reading, voting, and/or providing me with feedback.more...

Response to Perpetually23

When I wrote this erotic story, I intended for it to be a BDSM story.
Based on the feedback that I have received thus far, it's evident that it's a BDSM story in name only. I am aware that BDSM is intended to be consensual sex, though it definitely has its controversial aspects.
When I wrote this, I wanted to emphasize the power, dominance, and control that
Mr. Hardown had over Jenna. However, it seems that I forgot to include crucial aspects of BDSM, such as the safe word.
Unfortunately, it seems that a significant number of readers view it as a story that belongs in the nonconsensual/reluctance genre, which was not my intention.
I think what it ultimately comes down to is that ten pages of material isn't enough to properly tell a BDSM story and do it justice. There needed to be more buildup and development, and having one prior chapter was clearly not enough to fully establish what I wanted to be established in this series.
l will go back to writing BDSM at some point, but for now, I think I will either return to the point where I started or try out other genres.
Thanks for the feedback and constructive criticism.more...

This series really does deserve a nonconsensual tag, but that doesn't make it a bad series. Her enjoying the situation doesn't make it not rape (if that make sense). He blackmailed her, he drugged her, and there was no safe word.

Personally, I like stories that deal with blackmail, abduction, and rapey things like that because I'm just weird I guess, but I don't like it when stories confuse rape with consensual bdsm. It makes bdsm look bad, so just make sure you are clear about what is consensual and what is not when tagging and categorizing your stories.more...

Response to dubious consent comment

Those are all fair and valid points.
When I wrote this, I had to find a tone between Jenna expressing her willingness to have sex and Mr. Hardown having his way with her and doing as he pleased.
But yes, no matter how I interpret this, it's evident that this story involves blackmail,
coercion, and one person having significant and often unfair power over the other.
After reading the first comments on this story, I'm surprised the first chapter of "A Taste of Cheerleader Discipline" didn't get any comments suggesting that there was involuntary sex or rape since that story also involves blackmail and coercion.
Makes me wonder if the type of sexual behavior, the dominance in the act, and the place where the sexual acts occur give readers a different impression and perspective on whether there was consent or not.
Again, it's fiction so it's a good thing that the type of consent here is controversial in print only and not in real life.
Thanks for the feedback. I may write more BDSM stories in the future, and this feedback will definitely help.more...

I don't agree with wretched anon, but even your examples slant this as dubious consent due to the coercion. Hey, you wanna go do some bdsm stuff? Sure! That's consensual. Do this or you can't do this thing that is so very important to you is a bit smelly. You are certainly not alone in your interpretation of consent. So many stories rely on a level of blackmail. But it is not proper consent.more...