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Click here"So what are you going to tell Ms. Pusskins?" Courtney asked. "About the whole..."
"You mean the chemical?" he replied. "Fortunately, I am a wealthy man, and Ms. Pusskins likes money very much. So I'll just give her a raise, and I think we can forget about this silly incident."
"So I'm back on the squad?" she asked.
"Yes," he replied. "However, there is still one part of your punishment that you have not yet fulfilled. You failed to tell your friend, Jenna, that you were going to be here today. Therefore, you will have to return to this office at some point with her and take a comprehensive test together."
"I'll be more than happy to bring her back here for a test next week," Courtney replied.
"Excellent," Mr. Hardown stated. "Alright, Courtney, you're free to go now. Thank you for stopping by my office. I hope you have a fun night."
"Thank you for teaching me a lesson, Mr. Hardown," Courtney said. "I hope you have another lesson to teach me very soon. I'll see you around."
With a dirty wink, she turned around, flipped her skirt up, and smacked her ass as she opened the office door and skipped out of Mr. Hardown's office.
Mr. Hardown sat down and put his fingers in his mouth as he tasted Courtney's cum. Yep. He had a pretty nice salary. And his job had some pretty nice benefits. But right now, at this very moment, there was nothing that he enjoyed more than a nice taste of cheerleader discipline.
- COMMENTS
mrsterygorover 9 years agoAuthorYou have a great point there.
Writing erotica definitely has its challenges, and most of them involve believability.
It's difficult to write erotica and have what occurs in a story feel realistic
because, 1.) as you mentioned, it is a fantasy,
2.) it has pornographic sex as opposed to traditional real-life sex, and
3.) because I want to have as many kinky/erotic moments in a story as possible.
Perhaps my next erotic story will be more realism-based. My first erotic story, "A Saturday of Cheerleader Pleasure," was told in first person, didn't involve coercion/blackmail, and is easily the most realistic of the four stories that I have posted on this site.
After seeing how my latter stories have been received, I may go back to the road that I started on with my first story.
Thanks for the feedback and constructive criticism.
Perpetually23over 9 years agoThis is a little too unrealistic for me. Then again, I guess fantasies don't really have to be realistic. I just prefer more believability. If you really want to be great instead of just good, find a way for your stories to be completely believable no matter how crazy they get. Keep writing because you have real potential.
And to the anonymous user who can't form a basic sentence but feels the need to come onto a bdsm site and judge authors for posting stories that are complete relevant to the site, eat a dick.
mrsterygorover 9 years agoAuthorNot great, but not terrible seems to be readers' general consensus
when it comes to this story.
As I mentioned earlier, I have to keep working so that
I can produce great stories, not just good or decent ones.
Just out of curiosity, how could the story have been edited together better?
I suppose I could proofread and read through
each story at least one or two more times before posting them.
Thanks for the feedback and constructive criticism.
I try to respond to every comment that is posted on here and address whatever
constructive criticism I receive. The more I hear from readers, the more I
can strengthen my writing skills, correct my mistakes, and create better stories.
Anonymousover 9 years agoI thought the story needed a lot of editing, but I am extremely impressed with the author's response to constructive criticism.
mrsterygorover 9 years agoAuthorFirstly, check your grammar and spelling before you post. It's write and you're.
There are plenty of reasons why I'm writing erotic stories right now.
1.) I'm an aspiring writer. The more I write, the more I can get my name and work out
there. Writing also helps me learn more about myself and develop more ideas for future stories, both erotic and non-erotic.
2.) For feedback, positive and negative. I can't get better as a writer unless
I know what I'm doing properly and what I need to improve upon.
3.) When I make enough money to write something and publish it/make a film (book, screenplay, script for a pornographic film), these stories can be used as reference guides. Having something that I can refer to is always helpful.
4.) I like to entertain people. Being able to entertain and arouse people through these erotic stories gives me a sense of satisfaction. Are these sexual fantasies of mine? Sure. But I'm also hoping tap into other people's fantasies and show them what they would be like. Could I achieve that by making porn? Yes. But that requires money, people who are willing to engage in sexual acts, and a really strong marketing campaign. So erotic stories are the way to go for now. Some people will not be satisfied with my work, and that is fine. If I can generate enjoyment and/or create arousal in anyone through these stories, then I'm happy.
Hope this helps.
