The very version first chapter used to start with Kiowa packing while her mother was nervous instead of her traveling in Pion's car. What are your thoughts on switching it back?
Cheers and Happy Reading,
~Talyis.
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Love it so far
I am so happy i stumbled onto your story. Bravo, this story seems like its going to keep me occupied for nights to come. I adore your work. This story gives us a whole new world. I like that you put history and depth behind the plot. I'm hooked.more...
Keep your own counsel
It's your story. Don't drift in the wind and allow the readers to influence you.
my advice
TB, i liked the original opening of the first chapter. The only reason I could see for you to re-organize the structure, is if you feel the need to add in missing information?
Interesting confrontations, overt and subtle, in this chapter. More questions, more clues, you're feeding my addiction for mysterious.more...
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