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"Comms, lets look at the data from the second probe," Fiona ordered. "We have six months worth of data on this one for everyone to look at."
The second probe's data came up on the screen. Its entry into its target system was similar to that of the first probe with similar indicators; human habitable planet with industrial civilization and vessels in orbit and around the system.
The probe moved in for a closeup of one of the vessels on the outer edge of the system. It was vaguely similar to that of the vessels that the first probe showed, however, this one clearly showed a gold-green coloured hull and what was likely many heavy weapons.
The probe moved in toward the planet. It showed a familiar view of orbital stations and many ships in orbit.
As the probe moved in to image a smaller vessel, the vessel turned and opened fire in the direction the probe. The probe moved away at speed, leaving the vessel behind.
The probe moved in toward the planet on numerous occasions, each time being spotted by and aggressively hunted by alien ships.
"Well, I think we know from where our aggressive neighbours are coming," Clark said confirming the personal views of the other watchers in the room.
"So, what to we do now?" Capt. Watt asked of no one in particular.
End of chapter eleven.
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Damonkey9167 months agoSome people just cannot appreciate a good story they are getting for free. I applaud the author’s efforts. This is a very good story. Yes, there are spelling, grammar and punctuation errors….who cares!!!
Anonymous7 months ago"... "No, I do not want anyone to say that our office had prior knowledge or be able to show possible conflict of interest should this come to a trail where the JAG gets involved. ..."
Trial. I wouldn't mention it, but that has to be the fifth transposed letter, homonym, or otherwise word/grammar error I've seen so far on that page. Sweet lord...and it's worse because it's clear you know the right words, but autocorrect or something is just absolutely screwing with you. Freaking computers.
Second thing...why are they all so hostile to Ms. "Corden"? As far as she knew, she was literally just doing her job as law enforcement. Why the animosity? It's really weird. Sticking with it, but there's definitely a bit of grinding involved in getting to the good stuff, so far.
ThatMan12about 3 years agoPlease, who ever writes a story with a prologue, don't start it out with a character that doesn't matter. I guess I could say that I'm a reader invested in characters that have something to overcome, who become stronger and a better person after there setbacks. So, after reading the little bits of the other characters afterwards in the prologue (I'll admit, I could have invested more attention and time towards them) I became even more invested in Sean. All of the other characters seem to be people with silver spoons in there mouths (In my opinion) compared to what Sean is going through. (I'll also admit that I have been skipping through to see what Sean has to say, sue me!)
But for you to say that he plays no important role in the story, I ask myself, "Why am I even reading this? and what is the point of including him in this story?". If what I believe is to be true, I beg that who ever chooses to write a story, don't build up someone who you come out to say is not important, and doesn't serve any purpose in the plot.
I may be wrong, I dear hope that I am. But this story has lost my interest. I can tell that this author is great at writing military plots and has plenty of knowledge in that regard, so props for that. Maybe I can read this story some other time looking through a different lens.
I know most won't agree with my opinion, (oppinions are like asses, you may be interested in them, until it shits on you.)
Who ever get's this far in my writing, thanks. And I hope you can gain some knowledge from this.
