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"It's too late."
I stormed out of the apartment slamming the door shut. I felt sick to my stomach at what I had just seen.
"And here you were thinking you could change, son. You get an A for effort though."
"JUST SHUT UP!!!"
- COMMENTS
TheOldWidowabout 7 years agoI read all of them at once, better than reading a chapter at a time to get the feel of the black horror, creeping like mold to cover and stain. Well done.
Anonymousalmost 8 years agoin writing her, you made her too tough, her epiphany that she liked simon wasn't enough to soften her, then she goes and does this - she's weaker than simon, who throough his guilt and love for monica is willing to confess all
Karenasover 11 years agoDidn't like the Right Wing Slut comment.
Other than that, Simon's descent into madness is well-done. The scene with Monica is heartbreaking.
persorosaabout 12 years agoI gave this CH a 4 because I liked Monica's story, her past. I enjoyed reading how she became her. I like Simon fighting his "urges" but the ending felt abrupt. By that I mean, I get Monica deals with her frustration/anger by inflicting pain but why did she go for someone else when she could have gone for Simon? Because he hung up on her? It felt too easy and yet in RL that's kind of what we do isn't it.
Here are the thoughts I had as I read the entire thing:
Why does Simon have sex with the hookers before he kills them? The one he even goes down on? Who does that and then kills that person? Seems kind of intimate right before murder?
Why did you shift POV from Ch 1?
Overall I thought the story was very well written, especially since I know it was written over a short period of time and I appreciate how difficult that can be and to get everything right.
I enjoyed the story and voted accordingly. Great job.
