Laughing, she knew it was time to let the games begin.
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I wasn't impressed. The husband should have been there when she woke up. Not having a bullet in her head by his partner. What, did he call the cops and then bail. Maker my ass. Also doubt youd be orgasming if your neck was ripped to the point it hung to your chest. Also obviously the husband wasn't evil he felt remorse. Why'd she turn into super cunt? And since when do vampires howel? Started out good, ended terribly. Gave it a two. :/more...
a little disappointed
Have enjoyed a lot of your work in the past, but I don't know if you've changed editor or something as this didn't have your usual magic. Some of the sentences didn't seem to make sense, or were constructed clumsily. For me, there was a lack of tension too, and I didn't feel anything for the characters.
Sorry.more...
Hmmm... Whackdoodle
I guess you didn't see it. The reason the vampires hide behind fake werewolves makes sense...if you think about it. Yeah, you actually have to use your brain in this one, it's not spelled out for you.
So you gave it a 1 meaning you hated it, just because you didn't understand it? Fine. But there are NO kids in this. ANY monster story where the monster does kill humans, any human is in danger. Duh!more...
Gave it a one, not because of the writing, which was excellent;
But because of the convoluted plot.
The problem with stories devoid of morality is that they don't fit the artificial parameters set by the website. If there is no morality, then no one is safe, including children and the site is very adamant on excluding kids, rightly so; but real monsters would devour a child just as easily.
Next, why would they chase werewolves if their foe are vampires? After all that's two completely different species. And I don't know about you, but having a bullet blow out a chunk of my brain is going to seriously ruin my day, regardless of my species.
So for all that, I give you a one. Better luck next time.more...
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