It hadn't ended, not by a long shot, and right at that moment I couldn't have been happier.
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I thought this was original, well written (in spite of the quibbles by other commenters) and HOT. The ending was weak but overall I was still turned on.
Ya lost me
In their 4-some orgies, I couldn't keep straight who was whose sister/brother. Probably my fault. Good framework for story. Character development seems weak---All they ever do to grow & improve is to fuck more, which is not any real accomplishment. And if all these guys are as promiscuous as they are, why aren't the girls on the pill instead of relying on condoms? (Are they worried about STDs? They should be.)more...
Good but...
For God's sake learn the difference between lay, lie, laid etc. You get it wrong every time!
very very nice
bad ending though. Ive got a boyfriend back at college and we are gonna end it. All the relations ending in one paragraph, are you kidding me. That is like blue balls. otherwise, nice build up and characters and referring back and forth. Nice overall. Little more in depth of sex in the brother and sister in the next chapter.more...
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