I did so, but I was very frustrated at her stopping me. Once a guy is getting close he'll be angry as Hell not to finish. Brianna scooted herself away from me, and then sat up. She ripped the condom off so quickly I was afraid she'd take my cock with it, and then she took me in her mouth. This was like changing gears in a car that was going fast. It took a moment to get my bearing again at the difference in feeling, but it was wonderful to not have the condom on.
In no time I felt the eruption arrive. The first blast went into her mouth; she then pulled away and caught the rest on her face. I was locked in that blissful rigor mortis that sometimes follows after I blow my load. Brianna's face was painted in my cum. I could see it in her mouth as well. I didn't expect the transition, but I had no right to complain.
"Wow," I heard a voice say from the doorway. We both turned to see Brianna's sister Samantha standing there in her mock-conservative black work wear.
"I thought about knocking," said Samantha, "But I didn't think that you guys would notice."
My mouth was open, but I couldn't make words come out.
"Is he a mute?" asked Samantha. "In that case he might be the perfect guy."
I smiled considering my position between these two beautiful sisters, and wondered what was going to happen next.
Post Script: Thank you for interest and for once again reading my stuff. The writing of this particular kind of fiction can be very fun, but for me its hearing that you guys enjoyed it. So please vote and let me know what you thought in the comments. I'm always open to criticism but no hate for hate's sake. I definitely left this one open for more. Please let me know if you want it.
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Hot, but confusing.
I have to agree with the criticism that the protagonist (and everyone really) seems kinda doggish/slutty. As it stands, he does kinda come off like a jerk. I feel like there should be a moment of remorse, if nothing else. Right now, it seems like it doesn't bother him at all that he upset Brianna. Yet, his thoughts show he cares about her. There's a conflict of interest here: at times, I get the sense this is one of those stories where the main character is a stud and goes about hooking up with several sexy and reasonably loose women. Then there's the feeling that there's jealousy and attachment involved that leads me to think this is meant to be a love story of sorts. While it's not impossible to pull off both, it is tricky. One or the other should be established first. The trouble with constantly switching between the two is it's hard to say if everything's cool and they just have an open relationship (or a relationship at all, for that matter) or if the guy is just a pig. Whereas, if they fall for each other and afterward she suggests they explore with other girls, the reader would know no one is being hurt. There's also the possibility of going the other way around and having wild, open, meaningless sex that everyone's okay with and having a relationship bloom from it.
That being said, I do like this story. It's sexy and has a lot of potential. I'd love to see another chapter. I just wish there was less ambiguity to the plot.more...
So goddamn hot.
I absolutely loved this story.
Looking forward to a hot goth threesome.
Nice!
I'm a chubby Goth girl. How could I not enjoy it,, More please.
Hmm...
So, your protagonist is...kind of a dog, actually. He acts like he wants to have a relationship with Brianna, but the second he meets Kendra he wants to bone her. (No, he's not just "appreciating her assets" or "looking." He makes no pretense that, had Brianna not shown up, he probably would have screwed her in the back room, too. Also, unless she was testing him to see if he'd cheat on Brianna, Kendra is a bitch for trying to seduce him when she knows her friend likes him.)
You had some interesting, ah, euphemisms. "Fat little taco?" Maybe humor was what you were going for, but this one made me face-palm. It's hard to concentrate on the sexiness of a story if I'm snorting with laughter. Kinda ruins the moment, you know?
...And the addition of Samantha suggests a threesome in the next installment. Brianna seems like she doesn't want to share your protagonist, though, so I'm not sure how well that would be received. Guess we'll have to wait and see how this turns out in part three.more...
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Definitely enjoyed it, now I just have to wait for more.
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