Don't Ever Give Up Ch. 04

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Tim opened the cupboard above the stove, where he kept all the liquor. He jerked the bottle of Jack Daniels from its resting place and made quick work of the cap, tossing it onto the counter. He looked down into the bottle for a long second - just like before, Jack had nothing to say. He kept staring, and twice, he raised the bottle to his lips only to lower it again.

Out of the corner of his eye, something glimmered, catching his attention: his car keys.

There weren't many moments in life where everything suddenly cleared up, but he had one right then.

Within 30 seconds, the whiskey was back in the cupboard, the keys were in his hands, and he was in the driver's seat of his SUV. The knives would have to wait. He was probably already too late.

He'd been headed toward the interstate for five minutes when the phone rang. It was the chorus of Queen's "You're My Best Friend."

"Yeah," Tim answered.

"You in the car?" At a time like this, Tim was thankful for J.T.'s bluntness.

"Yeah," Tim replied.

"You going after her? Or you want to talk it over here first?"

"Dunno where she is," he said. "I'll be there in 20 minutes."

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TotosRevengeTotosRevenge5 months ago

Still hating your lead male.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago
Tim is the guy you love to hate

I get his pain and see the pain he perpetuates on himself and Julia but that will make the payoff that much sweeter. I see myself crying at the end of this!

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
hard to like

unfortunately Tim has become an unlikable part of the story.

it is hard to get invested in him, let alone feel sorry, or even basic empathy for him.

he is quite possible the stupidest fuck tard on the planes. Good thing he is a good looking millionaire with a great job and a big dick. Because he has the emotional capacity of a goldfish. If he cant show basic kindness to those he cares about, he is just a waste of air on this planet. Maybe he will get into a car wreck on his way over there. It would be nice to see him loose his job and find out she still cares about him, not just his perfect situation.

oh gee, the broken, brooding superhero. What is he, Batman

CumminginsiderherCumminginsiderherover 4 years ago
This started off great but is becoming stupid and redundent

Perhaps it's a good thing you quit writing. Your Cookies and Milk story was great with the main character being just slightly annoying and dense but still likable. This main character is a fucking Douche Bag and deserves a life of loneliness. This character has ZERO redeeming qualities that make me want to even root for him. I'm giving it one more chapter and if he is still a nasty asshole dipshit, I am done.

2 Stars and consider it an early Christmas Present.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
well done

quality writing.

when the story and characters get under the readers skin so deep that they take umbrage at the Authors work ,,, mission accomplished

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