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"Do we get levels for killing him? I should get in on this!" said Eliza as she lazily gutted him. His intestines spilled out of the slit in his stomach.
"Oh gods the mess! Eliza you don't cut there! Stomachs smell! And no you don't get levels, that's monsters only."
"Oh. My mistake. Well, he's not much better than a goblin so who knows. "
Rain could taste blood in his mouth and his vision was going hazy around the edges. He would scream but shock had fully taken hold. He could only watch as Lira timidly came toward him.
"E-everyones uhm, doing it, so I should too, right?" She pushed the knife she held between his ribs. Blood welled up in his throat.
"Rain, you lived as a stain on our town, be glad you're being cleaned... S-still, I'm sorry it turned out this way, I still feel bad, you should know." Lira murmured.
"F-fee..-l b...ad?" whispered Rain, red streaming from his mouth.
"Aww does the runt have a crush?" said Myra, she giggled and withdrew her knife from his side.
"I don't think getting laid is on his mind right now Myra. I don't think much is on his mind at all to be frank. Adlen finish the little fucker off, he's gotten boring. I get the feeling we've attracted the attention of a few monsters anyway." said Brax.
"Tchh, he was never going to be much fun, I mean have you looked at the guy? He makes kids look strong."
Adlen strode forward and with a swing of his spear he swept Rain's legs from under him. Rain crashed to the ground insensate and on the verge of blacking out.
"Here watch this. Watch me toss his ass."
Adlen stabbed his spear into Rain's stomach and hefted him up into the air so that Rain was hanging like some grisly war banner. With a heave of his level empowered muscles and a flick of his spear Adlen sent Rain flying over the lake to splash down near its center.
By the time Rain hit the water he was already dead.
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4'6" = 142cm
6'3" = 192cm
5'11" = 180cm
- COMMENTS
VictorDoUrdenabout 2 years agoAll over the place and going way to fast before the last dramatic thing even settles down
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoThe leader just publicly grabs random people to kill for fun and giggles with no one leaving or fighting back? Even medieval serfs fought back when the excesses of the nobility became too much. Only the dumbest rulers publically commit crimes like this, it invites opposition.
Even if he is too strong to beat in a fair fight, poison or numbers would bring down any ranker.
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoWhat is the point of this chapter? To introduce the 4-5 characters with no redeeming values? If you plan on killing them off, later, in a situation where they would live because of some basic decency, and empathy, then you will be making a point.
Do you plan on Rain, who you invested the most time developing as a character, to somehow come back from the dead?
I'm coming along as a reader, long after there are many chapters, but if this was a single post, I wouldn't come looking for chapter two. As is, I'll invest a bit more in reading further.
Technically, it is well written, but the premise of 'leveling' is a bit weak as a plot line due to lack of creativity, so plot does get you much. This, as is, alone a 2 star chapter, at best. But, with Lit's rating inflation problem, it's got more. Too bad, with someone to work with you on plot and story development, your writing skills could shine.
Here's hoping things improve.
GeoD
Vorstenover 3 years agoI was expecting better because I saw a later chapter first. This is just sadistic asshole world intro standard.
Well at least I know it improves
