The chuckle that formed in my throat turned into a loud, harsh, maniacal laugh that reverberated off the buildings around me. I could just make out the screech of tires as my one and only brother, the man who had just fucked me, peeled out. I imagined him desperate to leave this part of town and return to his wife and children. He would want to put this entire episode behind him and pretend it had never happened.
I think I'll call him tomorrow, I thought wickedly. I'll ask him how he's been, what he's been up to. He'll be rude and play ignorant, of course, but we'll both know the truth. And that's what's important.
I lit up another cigarette, inhaling deeply, then headed back to my little apartment only a few blocks away.
Tomorrow . . . yes, tomorrow we'll see . . . .
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Interesting
even though the subject isn't one I generally read. Good luck in the challenge.
Good tie in to the story.
I liked the twisted ending. The brother had it coming. Good story.
Great
What luck! As usual, FAWC delivers the goods - a load (cough cough) ... a load of good stories.
Characterisation is great, and not overdone. We are not drawn too much into the central character's world, just enough to sympathise with her for the short length of the story. There is hot sex as well as the early account of the more commercial side of her life, which serves both to give us a realistic feel for the world of prostitution and to set us up for the hot full on encounter in contrast to the luke-warm commercial blowjob. Background is well sketched, without lengthy passages of the: I live in blahdiblah, and this-and-that happened to me in my life. It all flows naturally along with the tale: use of hispanic words, her thoughts on a normal working night.
LOL, a twist to the tale too! She is nicely revenged on that judgmental brother.
Most of all - hot, well described sex. Jolly good!
(Oh, and safe too! I can review it on my blog. Rubs little hands with glee at thought of the other stories in the competition to cum ... sorry, come.)
Ha ha ha! 'Sting', you used that song title to full effect.more...
Nice!
I enjoyed this one in spite of myself. It's not the kind of tale I usually go for, but the writing is done so well, so sparse, clean and powerful, that it swept me right along. The end was an effective twist, and I found myself laughing with the protagonist, even though I was also going, ew ew ew! Nicely done.more...
Unnecessary ending
I would have stopped after "in my mind", right at the end of page 1. In fact, I did; it took me a while to notice that there even was a page 2, and it was a disappointment.
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