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"Please?"
"Okay, I'll dance." He rolled his eyes as she clapped her hands. "You win."
"If I say please again, would you strip, too?"
"Don't press your luck," he said, but couldn't keep a stern face.
"I won't," she said lightly. "But nothing's set in stone, right?"
- COMMENTS
Anonymous2 months agoI think the story was well constructed and written with a skill I seldom encounter. I like that there is not too much explanation so that I can enter into the story with greater expectation of enjoyment.
WilCox49over 5 years agoOK, I'm echoing MugsyB, I guess, but it was very nicely done. Good characters, good plot, and mostly it all hangs together.
I kind of question the eloping, though. Most places have requirements about marriage licenses, blood tests, and so on. (Or they did back when we got married, and I doubt it's changed.) But I'm kind of a famous nitpicker, and that detail does not spoil the story, so you can probably ignore me. Excellent job overall.
-- WWC3
WilCox49
MugsyBalmost 10 years agoI really enjoyed that! Such a sweet, well-written story. I definitely felt for each character and you wrote them with such depth - very impressive in short stories! Of course, I'm just a big fan so maybe I'm biased. ;-)
Naw. It really was an excellent story. Good job!
sheabluealmost 10 years agoA really nice, sweet story. I found the characters and situation totally believable. Nice use of the song, too. After the drama of the fight the make-up seemed a bit easy, but sometimes it's nice when we don't over complicate things.
