Flower Girl Ch. 01

Great beginning

This is the first of your multi-chapter stories I am delving into, and the beginning has me hooked. Lovely character development, and I look forward to the rest.

I started reading this story on the android app. I had to stop and think whenever the story shifted to or from the book that Tracy is writing. For a bit I was annoyed, then I realized that is what my brain does when I am engrossed in a book and someone interrupts me. I thought that was ingenious of DonnaBeck. As I got on my computer to post this, I found that the book Tracy is writing is in italics; the android app does not use italics. I don't know how to let the website know this...

Subway Girl and this Flower Girl are great stories!more...

Entirely Engaging!

I am absolutely addicted to the flaws and realism of your characters. I have read up to the seventh chapter you have posted, yet returned due to a nagging question I had about William's first email where he wrote "I am not much of a write..." was writer purposely misspelled here to emphasize the fact that he didn't proofread? At first I though misspellings were incongruous with his character, but after reading further perhaps it serves a foreshadowing for the many chinks in his armor that ultimately lead to a much more relatable man. Just thought I would ask, so if writer wasn't purposely misspelled you had the opportunity to deliberate and spell or misspell as you see fit!more...

Horticulturalist Whore?

Sorry DB, i just couldn't avoid crashing into that alliteration. I am impressed by the quality of your writing style and how well you are developing your characters.

I am also impressed that you were successful using italics in separating the main storyline from the sub-story of Andy & Vera.

The internet was invented by Rube Goldberg and we are lucky anytime this mishmash of incompatible systems and software actually manages to produce a coherent communication.

I agree with the named commentators and Anonymous "Delightfully Refreshing" praising you as a writer of a what promises to be a most excellent serial or novelette.

As for the analmousies and their infantile tantrums, the Liteotica site managers can assist you with filtering the trolls out and deleting abusive comments.

As for the grimmernasties and their fetish for worshiping at the grave of the dead language of Academic English.

If you are feeling generous, give them back the two minutes of consideration it took them to write their fatuous comments. And then go on and create in the style you prefer.more...

Great Start

I really enjoyed reading this stories first chapter and am looking forward to more. I thought it had clever believable banter between the sisters and the beginnings of two very interesting characters.
You do write well, with just the right balance between dialogue and description. Anxiously waiting for the next installment.more...