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Greg simply gulped and managed a half-smile. "That was bloody fast!"
"What a remarkably fast pregnancy," agreed Abigail before turning to Jack with a small grin. "You sure you don't want to stay and get to know all your new children?"
Jack let out a heavy chuckle. "I'd love to but we have a mission to get back to. Now, let's set a course due north. We have some islands to explore!"
- COMMENTS
wish_thinkerover 2 years agoThis story has a great outline and is well depicted in many areas. There is a huge amount of work that can be done to improve it however. Sex between officers is unheard of. It would have been a great help to get advice from a member of the Navy, or maybe better, read a couple of the many outstanding naval novels out there. The combination of technology like submarines, torpedoes etc., amazing, but as fiction can be justified. It was a sparse on details needed to better depict the entire vision, breath of a Horatio Hornblower type of novella. Maybe back up and review?
SecretLover32501almost 4 years agoI am enjoying this. I greatly appreciate your disclaimer up front about not ensuring accuracy.
Part of the training and qualification before a US Navy ship is allowed to deploy is towing another ship. To tow and to be towed.
A subject taught to ship's officers, without practice, is how to scout out and navigate uncharted waters. It's nothing like this.
Not trying to criticize the story.
Schwanze1about 4 years agogot a chance to read the rest. Trying to figure out if it's going comedic farce or serious but incompetent and lucky. Enjoying it either way.
Anonymousabout 4 years agoPutting aside the other comments, I've been enjoying this thoroughly!
Keep up the great narrative!
