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Once again, they disentangled their limbs and held each other close in a post coital cuddle. Nigel was just nodding off, when he felt Dawn move. "I have to get back." She said, "Mam and dad will have guessed where I am, 'cos they'll have seen my car back. They'll be fine with it, but I have to be up to do the breakfasts in the morning. See you then, sweetheart."
She slipped back into her dress, stuffed her underwear into her purse, blew him a kiss from the doorway and was gone. Nigel drifted off into a blissful sleep, wondering what other treats might be in store during his months in Scotland.
- COMMENTS
BohemianEcstasyover 18 years agoYou do a pretty good job of keeping this realistically paced, and you don't go overboard with the descriptions, which is good. You seemed to keep plot better before he went to town with Dawn, and plot is a rare thing in Lit--I'd let it shine a bit more.
Anonymousover 18 years agoI liked the pace that the story was taking early on - very natural for a true virgin. Then all of a sudden, the two are in bed without any real foreplay or seeming build up. Other than that this story line looks promising and the writing is generally good although some personal proofing (not just a spell checker) may be in order.
Anonymousover 18 years agoI thoroughly enjoy your writing style. Couple that with a great plot line and it makes for an entertaining read. Thank You. Ronnie W.
lentish_bobover 18 years agolook forward to the next chapters, wonder if the mother will join in at some stage?
