Half the Man Ch. 05

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She looked back briefly to Mari and with wide smile, gloated just a little bit — Harper was too kind to be cruel to excess, but she couldn't help herself, "Thank you so much for splitting up with Dylan. He has made my life more complete than I could have imagined in my wildest dreams. He is my lover, my best friend, my very soul.

"It was very good meeting you, but we must bid you adieu! Ta-ta!" Then much to the kids delight she swatted Dylan's butt and started for the exit.

Dylan picked up Pete threw him over his shoulder and collected his tablet from the table. "Well we have a plane to get on, you take care of yourself Mariette." as he turned with a slight limp to follow his wife and daughter. "Right behind you Lady Dove."

Mariette watched as her ex husband walked out of the mall and her life forever. She reflected on her years after Dylan. In truth they were better than okay, and sometimes even great. But after seeing him with his lovely children and hearing his wife's praise, she would forever wonder—'what if?'

Several minutes passed before she got up and left the coffee shop and when Mariette left, she was humming,

'I've got no strings

To hold me down

To make me fret, or make me frown

I had strings

But now I'm free

There are no strings on me...'

THE END

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Once again I would like to thank DeYaken, Laptopwriter, and Robert for their able help on my story.

I hope you enjoyed this different and unique romantic roller coaster ride.

Comments are always welcome.

A special thanks to Postscriptor the best editor there is.

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"You are such a beautiful cookie decorator Corrine," Mari said, and tickled her daughter's nose. "These Christmas designs are simply gorgeous." The little girl giggled and smiled.

The phone rang, and Mari looked at the caller ID. "Why would Monmouth Correctional Facility be calling? It's probably a wrong number." She let the call go and went back to cookie decorating.

Five minutes passed and the same number called again, Mari let it go again. After the third time, she decided to answer.

"Hello?"

A woman's voice came on the phone. "Will you accept a collect call from..."

"Mariette, honey is that you?"

"D...d...daddy?" The case broke when the phone hit the floor followed by a hysterical woman.

"Mom? Mommy what's wrong? Mom?"

The phone in two pieces on the floor cracked with static, "Mariette, Mariette?" a man's voice cried from the beyond the grave.

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RanDog025RanDog025over 1 year ago

I have to say that the author wrote a very good story but will never be great until he breaks away from the bad habits picked up from reading and writing stories her at Literotica. I had a very good author tell me why they use dot dot dots and I explained that a lot of the experience in the story is the way the story is written to allow the reader to dream or imagine what is being said, without the HYPER punctuation and the signal for pause by using the dot dot dots. The story line here was very well done but the writing itself was just down right bad. I majored in English Literature, Literary Theory and Criticism, Language and Linguistics, etc, etc,,, I did not become an English teacher but an Editor in Chief. So I do have a little experience and so suggest to all who could read this as Constructive Criticism to get away from the bad habits picked up here and take some College level Literary classes, Please! Score for all five chapters? 5 BIG ASS FUCKING FLAMING NOIVA STARS for each chapter but one each for the literary side!

SignedBTWSignedBTWover 2 years ago

Note To All

There won't be any more stories from Mostera1, he passed away on 12/17/17 from a massive heart attack per his friend Laptopwriter. R.I.P. Signed: BTW

Demosthenes384bcDemosthenes384bcalmost 3 years ago

Great work - Hope you are still writing! I found out about you when DFWBeast referenced you as an editor. Great stuff all around. 5*

Legio_Patria_NostraLegio_Patria_Nostraalmost 3 years ago

Infinity number of stars for this story!!!!!

IainmoreIainmoreabout 4 years ago
Brutal

This was brutal to read.

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