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Thank you
Thank you for your kind comments. Fixed the taught/taut, and just awaiting the update from admin. I'm much beyond 28 but I remember in my late 20s thinking I was old. Since it's her thoughts about herself, she thinks 28 is pretty old. Thanks for reading!more...
Very nice
I love your style and your leisurely way of telling the story, letting us get to know Pilar as a person. Just two nitpicks: You must be very young if you say that a woman could be pretty "even though" she's 28. The word you want is "taut", and not "taught", which is something a teacher did. Jans' story is hot and I will read Pt.2!more...
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