Lucia glanced back down to the wooden stairway and then out again to the snow-covered wilderness. "Look how beautiful it is Emily. Look how wild and free it is! Such a gift, and we should honor the giver. Fatima, you promised me the right to name the planet. I want to honor Sapphire, honor her love for us and her playfulness. I want to call the planet Heaven."
Fatima blinked. "Call the planet Heaven? A bit pretentious, don't you think?"
Jada turned to Fatima. "No, I think I get it. It's Sapphire's last thought before she died, that life is what you make of it. It's the thought that bound our two species together, the thought and the value that both our species could appreciate." Jada waved and pointed with her arm. "That planet out there, it can be anything we want it to be. Ricardo would have chosen hell. Why can't we chose the opposite? What's stopping us?"
The nine humans stared in silence at the outside scene. They were on a new virgin planet, a gift that was to be humanity's new home. The sun was only a few degrees above the horizon, and the strange-looking trees were in the deep shadows of their winter slumber. A lifetime of exploration and discovery was before them, and they owed it all to a single alien child who had the love and the courage and the selflessness to rebel and say no. Yes, perhaps it was an alien mind, a mind humanity would struggle to understand for generations to come. But with childlike determination Sapphire had bridged the gulf between her species and another species that was so unlike her own. And across that great gulf, Sapphire and the humans had shared their value of goodness.
It was now early afternoon and the last of the day's brief light was fading from the sky. In deep thought, Mark and his wives and his dear friends turned and returned down the stairway to the comforts of home and family.
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Just reread this...
I don't know why people are so negative. The author has done an extraordinary job of weaving an incredibly complicated story together. I can find some major flaws as well (too many characters, for one thing) but the story itself is creative, unique, and well displayed. I think that with an editor this could easily become a best-selling series. I don't know why it's being wasted on ungrateful readers on an erotica site.more...
Truly Awful
The writing on this story is painfully bad. The author is clearly in love with his own voice and has a deep and abiding hatred of the English language. I've seen more concise and well-written stories from high school writing classes. The plot, if it can be called that, is convoluted and I'll-conceived. I can't begin to fathom how someone could unironically enjoy this dreck.more...
Baffled
Not by the story.... Although some places confused me, with science that I could not follow, the story was masterful. I simply can't understand why so many readers have made negative comments. Maybe they simply can't comprehend anything more intricate than a quick jerk off read. Yes the story was very long but so well told that on more than one night I passed out while reading because I wanted to know what came next but my body wouldn't cooperate. Maybe one day this brilliant writer will return and tell us a little more about this society. Maybe he will write another story for our reading pleasure. Maybe he has gone on to be published and is now being paid to create such intricately woven stories. If so I hope I'll get the chance to read some of the published work.more...
So sad...
I have chosen to submit this comment as Anonymous, rather than as my Member name, as I don't wish to deal with the hurt feelings and emails of those who may feel insulted. Been there, done that. No thanks.
It is so sad that far too many of the comments are about story length, story classification (Illustrated), and submission form. This is a free site! You have paid nothing for the chance to be titillated, aroused, and even entertained! Perhaps you're familiar with the old saying "Don't look a gift horse in the mouth." It is most apt for those complaints. For those whose comments were, to be charitable, less intellectual and more scatological, the saying "Don't throw pearls before swine" seems to fit best.
It is blindingly obvious to all regular readers that there are few writers submitting to Literotica whose work actually rises to the status of literature. Hammingbyrd7 is one of those few. I have read all of his submissions to Literotica over the years and his work is so much better than almost all of the other submissions here. He has genuine talent! He can interweave multiple plots, create believable characters, write dialogue that doesn't sound stilted, and create sex scenes that are as emotional as they are titillating.
Does his work contain flaws? Certainly. But Literotica is a great place to work out the kinks (Sorry, I just couldn't resist that!) in one's writing style and sharpen one's skills. He has. Those of us who have read his submissions here have been privileged to watch a budding craftsman in his journeyman years. I would like to think that he hasn't submitted anything since 2009 because he has found a traditional publisher who appreciates his unique blend of science, philosophy, and sex enough to pay him. I would like to think that very much. But I also can't help but wonder if the scathing and pointless criticisms of his work hasn't simply discouraged yet another promising writer...more...
It was good reading
I like this one it was long but kept my attention. I wanted to kill quite a few of the bad guys which I assume the writer wanted.
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