"Hello Caleb. Welcome back."
"How long I been laid up this time?"
"Just overnight," Mary answered. "The bullet went through the muscle on your shoulder; it didn't hit bone or anything but you bled a bunch. I think you'll be back on your feet in a day or two." Mary fussed around straightening his pillow and the covers. "You just stay in bed until I let you get up."
"Yes 'em, whatever you say. Sides got nowhere to go now, but where ever it is, I think we ought to be together girl."
"Where to?" Mary asked as she and Caleb mounted their horses; Caleb on Gris and Mary on a bay mare he'd bought for her. It was almost three weeks after Caleb had been shot.
"I'd like to go see Wilma in Fort Bliss. Let her know about Ellie, if she don't already, and that the men that killed Ellie have been dealt with." Caleb looked at Mary and smiled.
"What say after that we go back and rebuild my, I mean our, ranch. The hill country around San Antonio is God's own back yard and I think we could make a life for ourselves there."
Mary coyly smiled and said "Suits me just fine. Let's go."
The End
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FRONTIER JUSTICE
is swift....fast....brutal....but not always legal. TK U MLJ LV NV
Good retelling of a standard Western plot
The characters are almost standard Hollywood issue for a programmer Western, but Caleb's motivation is certainly believable. The sheriff who understands the difference between Law and Justice was a nice touch.
My one complaint is that there was no erotic action in the story, any more than there would have been in the 1930s or 1940s oaters that this fits in with so nicely. The name of the site IS Literotica, after all. There were two points where you could have had Caleb take Mary to bed and it would have been organic to the story; I was disappointed you chose not to take advantage of them.
One other comment as regards formatting. When you have a character thinking, either put his thoughts in quotes with an appropriate wording like "he thought" or "he said to himself," something like that; or put his thoughts into italics so it is clear he is thinking now and not speaking. Less confusing for your readers.more...
western sci fi
way too much circumstance and "good luck" tracing this band of murderers in wide open spaces. Still an engrossing and enjoyable read - just not up to usual level of believability.
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