Not sure if I hit what I was aiming at but at least I tried. I don't see myself coming back to these characters so if anyone really wants to continue the story you have my blessing.
-Ahaz
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you gonna finish it?
needs an ending.
Fourth time reading this
What I want to know is this: why didn't the wife try to get the husband to go out on a date with her to go bowling? And why didn't she learn how to golf? I know for sure that people can go to the bowling alley to just watch...why didn't she do that? If she was so unhappy, she could/should have made extra effort. Nope, what this sad tale is about is neglect from her to him, and him to her. However, after 23 years and raising two kids and giving up his fun things, what did she expect? I realize she thought she was being neglected, but what about him for 23 years? Sorry, but cheating even though she served him divorce papers, the divorce still had not gone through. So no matter what, she is cheating on him. Maybe if she makes the effort he makes the effort back. What he saw was that she basically didn't give two hoots about him and his desires. So whatever the lawyer said, Jerry could and should have countersued for a divorce due to neglect and asked for everything. Although, that doesn't seem like the character portrayed here. Nope the wife got a snit up her butt from one of her co-workers and just couldn't let it go. Someone really should rewrite this showing the neglect on both of their parts. But if it wasn't neglect, I wouldn't have even read this four times. Something just wasn't right with it and me, and I had to just figure it out. I have been neglected for a period of something like 25 years and then a couple of times when I have been neglected as a husband. It isn't nice and I don't think she did it on purpose. I don't believe neglect is on purpose except in the case of a child.more...
Good story, for sure
Can't blame the wife. Life is to short to spend it in a loveless marriage, this isn't the 1950's (thank heavens) where the woman had few choices. She gave the husband the chance to work on their marriage and he couldn't be bothered. Some couples loose the sexual desire, but their marriages survive as a companionate ones, but absent companionship, it's a dead marriage.
She'd have been a fool not to move on.more...
What an inversion!
You made the wife not a moron for sure, but made the husband a moron instead. It really doesn't matter who you make the moron, you know.
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next time you write an UNFINISHED story put the warning at the BEGINNING.
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