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Thank you for reading my story I hope you had as much fun reading it as I did writing it. Please take the time to vote on the story – I love feedback in all forms. If you want, I would also appreciate comments on methods of how to improve my writing style and how I set the scene etc, as I am trying to improve my writing in any way, shape or form possible.
Thank you,
Coop83
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 5 years agoYou did good, but I think you should have at least another chapter.
Anonymousover 8 years agoFor chap.1 you have done an excellency job. Now you need to follow through with more chapters of their life together . This was a love story for a life time from his birth, and Sara has always been the true love of his life , KEEP UP THE EXCELLENT WORK
Anonymousalmost 10 years agoiv read alot of stories, but this one really caught my attention, the abuse and standing up for women really spoke to me, really look forward to the next chapter
DYNO224almost 10 years agoLiked your story! romance is the spice that makes a story for me .
Anonymousover 10 years agoFor clarity's sake it should be led--as in to lead or to be led. It reads much smoother that way regardless of the fact some teachers want it to be lead, lead and lead. By the way, there is no such word as irregardless, the word is regardless. Think about it. The generally accepted term for ejaculation is cum rather than come, which can be confusing. Always go for clarity. If what you have written makes a reader mentally stumble it creates a negative feeling. The story was excellent and the writing mostly good. Keep writing--I gave it a 5.
