Marcus of Duros Ch. 03

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Marcus stopped his downward journey and spent a moment brushing his finger around the area she had responded to in lazy circles. Finally she could contain herself no more.

"IT'S NOT THAT KIND OF SENSITIVE MARCUS, IT'S TICKLEISH!" She cried her as legs thrashed and her hands desperately pushed at his.

"Ohhhh, well then I guess I should pick up where I left off." Marcus answered teasingly as his hand began to travel downwards again towards her dripping pussy.

"Mmmmm that sounds good..." she moaned with renewed passion.

As Marcus's hand began teasing the inside of her thighs near her pussy he felt her shiver again. Quickly he pulled his hand back up towards her stomach.

"Oh sorry, must have been another sensitive spot." He chucked darkly.

"Nooo Marcus pleasseee... go back..." She moaned desperately, begging him with her eyes just as insistently as she had with her voice. "Pleaseee Marcus..." Her lips only inches away from his, she closed the distance quickly and captured his lips in a frantic kiss.

Her kiss lacked the sweetness, or the tenderness of the kisses they had shared earlier that night. This time her tongue forced its way into his mouth, searching out his own, coiling around it fiercely.

Marcus's surprise only lasted for a second as his fingers began inching ever closer to her now soaking center. As his fingers finally found her slit and began tracing easy circles, she moaned into his mouth and broke their kiss.

"MmmmMMmmm... Marcus, ohhhhhh that feels soo-ooo good."

Her eyes bored into his with unbridled desperation. Her gaze was locked with his as if it were the only thing keeping her grounded.

From what Marcus could feel, her pussy was now almost dripping it was so wet. A warm, sticky, fluid bathed her lips and upper thighs where she had been grinding against him. Looking down, he saw that that his briefs where his cock sat erect were completely soaked with the same juices. The revelation turned him on to a new level, and drove his had to explore more of her soaked pussy.

Finally Marcus located her sensitive clit, his fingers drawing firm circles over the swollen bud. Chloe's eyes rolled back, no longer able to maintain the eye contact. Her mouth, which had previously been parted seductively, now opened wide and formed a silent scream as her body went limp. Puzzled Marcus continued his circles over her clit.

In seconds a strangled cry erupted from Chloe and her body began to convulse violently, even more violently than it had a minute ago when he was playing with her nipples.

"Ohhhhhhhhhhhh Marccccuuuuuuuuuuuuussssss." As she came again her eyes flashed open and locked with his. Her hands, which had been laying limply on the bed, now clenched at the hand on her clit. Urging him to go faster.

"Yeeeeessssssss Maaaarrrrccccuuuussssss... ohhhhhhhh..." As she finished her orgasm in a final shiver a small amount of fluid leaked from deep inside her pussy.

Marcus stirred at it with his fingers. It was slightly thicker than the juices that had bathed her pussy before, and was a slightly different shade of white. On a whim he brought his fingers up to his mouth and tasted it, sucking both his index and his middle fingers clean of the white fluid.

The fluid had a sharp, tangy flavor, mixed with a heady musk that Marcus found intoxicating.

As his eyes returned to her face he noticed her staring open mouthed at him with undisguised surprise. "What is it Chloe?"

She swallowed with a loud gulp and her voice came out shakily, "nothing I just..." She began hesitantly. "I just want you inside me Marcus, please!" She finished in a rush.

"Oh is that all?"

"Don't tease Marcus. You know what I want..." As she spoke she reached down between them and slipped a hand inside the waistband of Marcus's briefs.

Her hand quickly found his rock hard member, and closing her fingers around the shaft, began pumping up and down softly. The feeling was exquisite. She was squeezing his dick with just the right amount of pressure, forcing several drops of precum from the head.

She looked pointedly at him as she batted her eyelashes flirtatiously. "You do want to be inside me, don't you Marcus?" She said softly, her voice husky with desire.

"Yessssss..." he groaned as her hand pumped faster

"Then do it... please Marcus... I want you inside me." At her words, Marcus reached down, pulled his briefs off, and threw them to the floor.

Repositioning himself to that her legs rose on either side of his hips, he took his dick in his hand and began stroking at her still soaking pussy. His strokes elicited gentle moans from Chloe, who was still watching him with wide eyes. Locating her tight entrance, he slowly began sliding his now slippery cock into her.

"OH... MY... GOD MARCUS. You feel soooooooo good." She moaned as he bottomed out, fully inside her.

He grunted in agreement, trying desperately to maintain control. Her pussy was so soft and warm, but at the same time the it clenched strongly onto his dick, as if trying to hold him inside her.

Marcus pumped in and out of her as slowly as he could, trying to forestall his orgasm and prolong the intense sensations. Her voice pulled him back to reality, raising his head from where he had laid it on her shoulder.

"Marcus go faster. I want you to come for me. Faster Marcus please." The unexpected affection in her voice and in her eyes warmed his heart, as he grunted in assent.

Picking up the pace, Marcus began to thrust into her with long, hard strokes. Her ragged moans echoed in his ears, as he began to feel the warm tickle of orgasm begin to rise in his groin and build outwards. Sensing his tension, Chloe began to grind him into her even harder, pulling at his hips with her hands.

"Yes Marcus... come for me!"

"Soon... mmmppphhh... coming!" Marcus grunted out as his orgasm bubbled over, his cum shooting into her still sopping pussy.

"Ohhhh yessss Marcussss..." She groaned as she felt his cum coat her insides. Her blue eyes locked with his as he shuddered, his orgasm dissipating.

"That was amazing Marcus..." She trailed off wistfully.

"Hope you didn't mind."

"You idiot," she smacked his cheek lightly, "why would I mind?"

"Well... we did just meet this evening."

"Yup, and now we're stuck with each other. Hope YOU don't mind." She teased. "Besides, I thought I was never going to get you into bed. After all, all we ever had at the bathhouse was other girls, and they loose their allure after a while, especially if you like-"

Her voice cut off abruptly as she clapped a hand over her mouth, a deep crimson blush rising in her cheeks. Marcus chuckled at her confession, amused by her embarrassment.

"It's not exactly a secret to us in The Legion Chloe. Most of us find it quite... arousing to imagine. "Marcus said as he clenched and forced blood into his limp cock. She jerked and gasped at the surprise of being filled again, if only briefly.

"Besides," he said as he chuckled at her surprised expression, the blush still high in her cheeks, "I'm sure you learned some useful... things... in the bathhouses with them. At his last teasing remark he pushed himself off her, clambered off the bed, and walked into the bathroom.

Wiping himself clean he took a moment to pee haltingly, as he flushed the last of his cum out. Feeling refreshed he walked back out into the bedroom. Chloe had remade the bed, as they had torn the sheets into an enormous mess in their passion. As he watched her she smiled, buttoning the shirt that Marcus had given her. His cum had begun to drip out of her and trail down her thighs.

"As sexy as that is Chloe," he said, pointing to the mess between her legs, "you might want to wash up."

He grinned as she walked past him, swaying her hips seductively back and forth as she went. The excessive swing was for his benefit he assumed, as she smiled knowingly at him, closing the door softly.

Pulling down the sheets with a snap he flopped onto his side with one arm wrapped underneath his pillow. Finished in the bathroom, Chloe came out and followed suit, flopping down to wiggle her back into Marcus's stomach. Curling her legs to mirror his, she snuggled happily into him. Pulling his free arm over and cuddling it between her soft breasts, she sighed contentedly.

"Not a bad day, all things considered." Marcus said, whispering quietly to himself.

"Same here." She said in a muffled voice, her face pressed into the pillows.

Marcus, recovering from his shock at being overheard, felt sleep tugging at his eyes. Finally closing, them he drifted off into a comfortable sleep. Chloe's soft body nestled comfortably with his. His hand cuddled lovingly between her soft breasts.

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theanalisttheanalistabout 10 years ago
to anon 3/26/14

if you want your characters to be more realistic, go watch a documentary. There all kind of human beings. Why can't Marcus and Chloe be the ones with the traits described by the author? Why does they have to be like you described even though they tend to be common.

The author was trying to write about someone extraordinary not a typical example of people in a society.

chubs450chubs450about 10 years ago
previous comments.

MC behavior is possible in a sense. if a culture raises its citizens with different morals and views on human life, than taking a life wouldn't cause the ptsd or psycho personality s that are described. marcus is raised to view war as a daily and mundane job as it were. therefore its as simple as perhaps playing pro sports for the men of duros. also, they may have been put through severe training that focused their trauma in other directions, not just mental.

cittrancittranabout 10 years ago
While I agree with certain points of the anon below me...

Specifically, the part about the Durosian Lords' behavior (which, on the other hand, was required a bit by the plot to help with the Lieutenant's nervousness), and the part about Marcus being either shellshocked beyond much else, acting like an arrogant prick, or seeming utterly jaded about life, (or at the very least compartmentalized to a high degree), I'm not sure I agree about the women needing to be underhanded.

Not because I don't think it would necessarily happen (it probably would), but because if the author doesn't want that in the plot, then it doesn't really feel like it HAS to happen.

The aforementioned characters' behavior though? That.... should probably be noted, yes.

And I heartily agree with the sentiment that women wearing shirts which are far too tall for them look adorable in them.

Thank you hentai.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Just read the story in one go. Interesting idea and plot, but there is criticism...

You are a good writer. Your sentences are clean, easy to read, and the plot is easy to follow. The idea is interesting, and Durosian culture is an interesting premise, but... your characters are off.

First of all, Marcus. He has killed 150 men. His behavior, on the other hand, is not of someone who had killed even a single man. When a man spends years killing and killing and killing, two things can happen: a) he becomes a psychotic wreck, or b) he develops a certain air about him as if there is no shit in the world that could get to him now; that everything that he encounters is trivial, and that everything he does is a god-given right.

Marcus' thoughts and views, however, are exceedingly innocent and egalitarian. He simply does not sound like someone who had grown up in a Spartan-like society (because, let's face it, Duros is like Sparta of ancient Greece). I know that you want to make him a kind of a revolutionary - in his mind and his views, at least - that would care for his girl, for the sake of this story. But that does not fit the profile of Duros. Marcus simply seems like present-day American. Not hard Durosian. No matter what you think, society has exceedingly strong say in what you become as a person, and your Marcus is not what Durosian society would have made him.

Durosian Lords also lack that thing that would have made them Durosian in nature. They sound more like French noblemen who are regaled by war stories. Real veterans know that war is horror, and there would have been a different air in Marcus' report in the previous chapter.

When I say all this, that doesn't mean that everyone is a heartless son of a bitch - on the contrary, they would care for their soldiers a lot - but things would have been different.

As for Durosian women, of which Chloe is the only example, I see that they are mostly a model of oriental submissiveness. That fits the profile, as she could really be a woman that could spin a hard soldier's mind; especially if she was "trained" in the arts of seduction, as I would expect it to be the case. What I would expect as well, is that Durosian women are actually quite vicious, but with secretive and underhanded means. That would give your story an additional layer. The other option would have been that if Marcus is the atypical Durosian with his oddly egalitarian thoughts, then Chloe would have been a scandalously rebellious woman from Durosian standard's point of view, who would have given him something to fight for. These sorts of things simply spice up a story in a significant way.

So, bottom line is that you need to work on your characters from a bit realistic point of view, if you want your stories to be really interesting. The way you are doing it now might seem sweet and all, but ultimately it's not memorable enough. But, since this is your first story, I hope that you can take this into account for your subsequent ones, because nobody ever became a good writer - be it erotic or non-erotic - if he didn't write all the time.

chubs450chubs450about 10 years ago
nice

2thumbs up. Very nice sex scene

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