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Click here"Good morning, Max!" Martina says.
"Good morning, Martina! How are you?" Max wonders.
"Fine! You?"
"Fine, thanks you. I know that I wrote 1.00 pm. You are welcome."
"Now on the morning?"
"Yes."
"But your case?"
"The case wanders me. Do you come?"
"Yes, I come; first I will finish the food."
"Eat calm. There are still time."
"I will do it."
"I know."
When Martina leaves the apartment, so she takes the Taxi. She shows the mobile to the driver. The driver drives on the way. He talks English with a French accent with the nervous woman. Martina sees that he watches her, but she says to him that he have to follow the traffic rules. Yes, it is true. The two persons sing Brother John in two mixed language, Swedish and French.
Next moment the driver stays and says that they are here. Martina pays him and then she walks to the house. She stops and opens the mouth as if it is really a dream. The professor's house is a modern mansion with a botanical garden, two football plans and three swim pools. It is beautiful, delightful and big. Martina calls Max.
"Yes?" Max says.
"I am here." Martina says.
"I come to you."
Max drives with the powered wheelchair to Martina.
To be continued.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 9 years agoUnfortunately your poor command of English has kept you down and using a Swedish person who's command of good English is almost as poor as yours, as an editor was a mistake.
I have edited some of Sexnovela's work and even then the published version only has some of the changes included that I made. Editing stories where English is a second language is very time consuming and as all editors on Literotica are volunteers, I suspect many don't want to commit the time. I have, and it is very demanding and takes several complete run throughs to get it into any sort of readable text.
Unfortunately I can't help you as I have a constant flow of stories sent to me for editing, that I don't have spare time.
ChineseSwedeabout 9 years agoAuthorI tried and tried to seek after the new editor in the forum. No new editors. :(
Anonymousabout 9 years agoWriting in a foreign language (and in your case, possibly a third language?) must be very difficult and you should be praised for the attempt.The theme of the story is very interesting and could, with decent editing, prove to be worthwhile. However, I regret that your editor is not very good (or perhaps not too bothered about doing a decent job). If you can find a first-rate editor to help lick your stories into shape, then you could see a great improvement.
Anonymousabout 9 years agoWith or without an adequate editor. I totally appreciate the uniqueness of this story. Please continue writing, regardless of the hateful criticism.
Anonymousabout 9 years agoI am bilingual, and English can be a hard language sometimes due to the fact that they do not follow that same rules as Spanish, french, or itilian for example. You tried your best chineseswede and I saw that. Nonetheless the story was hard to follow. I could tell what you meant but became irritated and did not finish the story all though it had great potential. I also encourage you to keep trying, but do not put yourself out there unless certain because people can be cruel.
